“When people succeed, it is because of hard work. Luck has nothing to do with success.” Do you agree or disagree with the quotation above? Use specific reasons and examples to explain your
Position.
Clearly, I strongly agree with this statement which is persons flourish for reason of effort. There is no alternative way to get to the top. Succeed is a result from process which is struggle. In my opinion, the most imperative object is processing to make it and blessing is not part of quirk to be success.
First of all, tragedy is causing of hardwork because I can learn progression about it. Route of success would give a lot of methods how to reach target. For instance, nowadays in Indonesia, hot news about Sandy Sandoro. He is a great singer who follows sing audition at broad. He made it as a winner in that competition and he got standing applause from audience also judger too. He was a street musician previously but everyone knows him now. As a result, he becomes famous the reason he was working hard to achieve goal.
Second of all, succeed is about experience impression would guide me to give about right and wrong. When I keep trying to reach my goal. Certain it would spread me new occurence incident is part of my hand fingers.
All in all, ups and downs are piece of keep trying. When i try to achieve my target, i got trouble. For an example, retail store’s entrepreneur like Kuncoro Wibowo. He is the first built his new store in Karawaci area but it was fire and he got not balance from his own store. But he keep open that store and it is starts all over until he has more than 200th stores all over Indonesian part. Thus, from his failure and he attempt to not give up, he could be a great man and success absolutely.
In summarize, there is no short way to be success and Luck has nothing to do with success.
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Sentence: Clearly, I strongly agree with this statement which is persons flourish for reason of effort.
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Suggestion: Refer to is and persons
Sentence: Succeed is a result from process which is struggle.
Description: The fragment Succeed is is rare
Suggestion: Possible agreement error: Replace Succeed with success
Sentence: As a result, he becomes famous the reason he was working hard to achieve goal.
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Suggestion: Refer to famous and the
Sentence: All in all, ups and downs are piece of keep trying.
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Sentence: But he keep open that store and it is starts all over until he has more than 200th stores all over Indonesian part.
Description: The token is is not usually followed by a noun, plural, common
Suggestion: Refer to is and starts
Sentence: Thus, from his failure and he attempt to not give up, he could be a great man and success absolutely.
Description: The token to is not usually followed by a negator
Suggestion: Refer to to and not
Sentence: Certain it would spread me new occurence incident is part of my hand fingers.
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Sentence Length SD: 4.837 7.5
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All in all means in conclusion.
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Score: 16 in 30
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
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