Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Because people are busy doing so many different things, they do very few things well. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Even though it seems that technology progress has enormously improved people’s life, it makes people busier since they must do more tasks in shorter time. To wit, in the industrialized world, individuals are requested to do much works. In this situation, people should manage their time so as to properly carry out their duties. However, there is a never-ending debate among a plethora of people about whether a busy individuals do their job very well or not.
First and foremost, provided that an individual has multifarious tasks, he or she may have lower concentration. it is due to the fact that huge amount of work increase stress and exhausting culminating in losing concentration. Therefore, it is probable that they cannot handle all the task properly. A research, recently conducted by a reputable center in Japan, presents that people accepting miscellaneous duties are not accurate enough because they cannot focus on a specific task. In fact, they make more mistakes rather than people conducting a certain activity, and they are not successful in achieving a higher job position.
Moreover, time is a key role for doing a job, and it is very hard to manage. Although it seems that busy people are very successful and prosperous, the reality contradicts this view point. they, In effect, cannot organize their time; accordingly, they attempt to conduct their duties in a short period of time. As a result, most of their works are incompletely done. I can vividly remember that when I attended the university, I had a part time job. I should have done my homework as well as my job in the restaurant. Unfortunately, I had merely limited time to do all of my tasks, yet I could not simultaneously handle both duties. At the end of the semester not only did I fail 2 courses but also I lost my job. All of these happened inasmuch as I did not have enough time for doing both job.
To put all the assertion into perspective, I firmly assert that people having a cornucopia of tasks carry out them inappropriately since, in my opinion, they have lack of concentration and limited time.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 230, Rule ID: MUCH_COUNTABLE[1]
Message: Use 'many' with countable nouns.
Suggestion: many
... world, individuals are requested to do much works. In this situation, people should...
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Line 1, column 293, Rule ID: SO_AS_TO[1]
Message: Use simply 'to'
Suggestion: to
...uation, people should manage their time so as to properly carry out their duties. Howeve...
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Line 1, column 423, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[2]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'individual'?
Suggestion: individual
...plethora of people about whether a busy individuals do their job very well or not. Fir...
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Line 1, column 466, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ividuals do their job very well or not. First and foremost, provided that an ind...
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Line 3, column 113, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: It
...he or she may have lower concentration. it is due to the fact that huge amount of ...
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Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: They
...he reality contradicts this view point. they, In effect, cannot organize their time;...
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Line 5, column 296, Rule ID: PERIOD_OF_TIME[1]
Message: Use simply 'period'.
Suggestion: period
...empt to conduct their duties in a short period of time. As a result, most of their works are i...
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Line 5, column 436, Rule ID: EN_COMPOUNDS
Message: This word is normally spelled with hyphen.
Suggestion: part-time
...when I attended the university, I had a part time job. I should have done my homework as ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
accordingly, also, but, first, however, if, may, moreover, so, therefore, well, as to, in fact, in short, as a result, as well as, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 15.1003584229 66% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 9.8082437276 92% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 13.8261648746 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.0286738351 82% => OK
Pronoun: 48.0 43.0788530466 111% => OK
Preposition: 38.0 52.1666666667 73% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1748.0 1977.66487455 88% => OK
No of words: 359.0 407.700716846 88% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.86908077994 4.8611393121 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.35284910392 4.48103885553 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.96088879469 2.67179642975 111% => OK
Unique words: 202.0 212.727598566 95% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.562674094708 0.524837075471 107% => OK
syllable_count: 557.1 618.680645161 90% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 9.59856630824 125% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.94265232975 162% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6003584229 92% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 39.3791851313 48.9658058833 80% => OK
Chars per sentence: 92.0 100.406767564 92% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.8947368421 20.6045352989 92% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.57894736842 5.45110844103 139% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 8.0 5.5376344086 144% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 11.8709677419 42% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 3.85842293907 181% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.88709677419 143% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.181817819402 0.236089414692 77% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0579256962966 0.076458572812 76% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0498012360115 0.0737576698707 68% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.109163298571 0.150856017488 72% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0639305631053 0.0645574589148 99% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.0 11.7677419355 93% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 53.21 58.1214874552 92% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 10.1575268817 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.97 10.9000537634 101% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.44 8.01818996416 105% => OK
difficult_words: 89.0 86.8835125448 102% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 10.002688172 90% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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