Educational institutions should actively encourage their students to choose fields of study that
will prepare them for lucrative careers.
The statement emphasizes that universities must encourage students to choose fields of study that
will prepare them for lucrative careers. Lucrative careers can be a certain thing if one is opting
for lucrative jobs. However, in the field of business and social sciences the lucrative careers
will have very less significance. Further, doing so will undermine importance of other jobs
that are significant but not high paying , causing imbalance in the society.
Firstly, the idea of encouraging students to choose fields of study with lucrative career option
roots from the idea that earning more is more important than getting important things done. Not all
professions are lucrative. However, each and every profession has their social and economic
significance. Favouring certain jobs over other will not only cause imbalance in society but it
will be almost impossible to fit in all college graduates within a limited sector of jobs. Should
lucrative careers be the main focus for any person, most students should choose the field of
medical sciences over other as they pay the highest in general. However, there will never be
limitless amount of job vacancies that will suffice all. More significantly, doing so will
undermine other less paying jobs that are equally significant. For example, farming is a very
significant job throughout history that has always yielded less for farmers. Yet, without farmers
there will be no food served on ou plates.
Secondly, the role of any university is to make students able human beings - educated and
wise enough to take their own decisions regarding their career. Not all men are motivated by money,
many are driven by passion and an urge to get things done at first place. When universities guide
students just on the basis of lucrative job options, we can lose many great minds that would
otherwise have done great in their field of passion. For example, if ETH Zürich had persuaded
Einstein to get a degree in law because it paid great at that time, we would have lost one of the
greatest scientists that the world has ever known. Similarly, we could have lost many great minds
and great entrepreneurs if they were dissuaded away from their passion in search of lucrative and
secured career ahead. The job of any university should be rather to guide the student to discover
and follow his passion.
Finally, there are much more important things that a society must address than just finding its
youth secured jobs and universities being an part of it, should play a major role in
shaping students to solve these problems. World will only become better when we work collectively
towards noble causes one that will bring peace and prosperity and will secure our well-being as a
conscious species. Universities shall take steps in bringing up students with a sense of such
responsibilities rather than an urge for chasing money and secured life. We need more mavericks
like Elon Musk who bet all his fortune to speed up the advent of sustainable energy and reviving
humans innate desire to explore way beyond what's possible. As Robin Sharma says, " Seduction of
safety is much more dangerous than uncertainty of failure".
In sum, though having a good lucrative future is more attractive to many and university persuading
students to follow it seems a good thing in the short-term, it will cause chaos on the long run.
Less paying but significant works will be undermined. Moreover, doing so will dissuade people to
follow their passion at the cost of secured life and to try new things that will make the
world a better place to live.
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Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 22.0 19.5258426966 113% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 29.0 12.4196629213 234% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 18.0 14.8657303371 121% => OK
Relative clauses : 16.0 11.3162921348 141% => OK
Pronoun: 37.0 33.0505617978 112% => OK
Preposition: 71.0 58.6224719101 121% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 12.9106741573 54% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 3145.0 2235.4752809 141% => OK
No of words: 601.0 442.535393258 136% => OK
Chars per words: 5.23294509151 5.05705443957 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.95129289623 4.55969084622 109% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.62052079776 2.79657885939 94% => OK
Unique words: 300.0 215.323595506 139% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.499168053245 0.4932671777 101% => OK
syllable_count: 935.1 704.065955056 133% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 6.24550561798 96% => OK
Article: 4.0 4.99550561798 80% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.10617977528 129% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.77640449438 113% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.38483146067 91% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 27.0 20.2370786517 133% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 23.0359550562 96% => OK
Sentence length SD: 49.4974192563 60.3974514979 82% => OK
Chars per sentence: 116.481481481 118.986275619 98% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.2592592593 23.4991977007 95% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.66666666667 5.21951772744 89% => OK
Paragraphs: 40.0 4.97078651685 805% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 66.0 7.80617977528 845% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 20.0 10.2758426966 195% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 5.13820224719 97% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.83258426966 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.308404638342 0.243740707755 127% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0869327881221 0.0831039109588 105% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.10465303857 0.0758088955206 138% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0699569782284 0.150359130593 47% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0798279184397 0.0667264976115 120% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.3 14.1392134831 101% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 49.15 48.8420337079 101% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 12.1743820225 98% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.35 12.1639044944 110% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.8 8.38706741573 93% => OK
difficult_words: 117.0 100.480337079 116% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 11.8971910112 92% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 11.2143820225 96% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.7820224719 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Maximum six paragraphs wanted.
Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.