Integretated
Fulfilling our needs and desires make our lives better and satisfies our comfort zone .However, we sometimes face the issue of doing the things which we do not really favor .As living in a communal world we definitely have to complete unfavorable tasks .I feel this way for personal and social reasons.
Personally ,right from the beginning of our lives we are being the reason of our parents sacrifice .Despite the fact that they love us even more than themselves ,they usually have to do things without actually wanting to .For instance, when I was born my parents could not go abroad for a week for work because I could not stay without my mother. Consequently they abandoned the idea of leaving the country because of me. This example demonstrates the fact that we usually need to compromise.
Socially ,being an integral part of socialization we have to make a barrier against our dominant ego and care for others too. Imagine living without thinking about others .At first it seems that life would be easier but actually it would not .For example when a teacher shouts at you at school ,you would like to tell a sharp word or somehow protect yourself, you need to keep silence and pretend that you feel sorry even if you do not .Or sometimes you have to talk to people whom you do not like just because they are your relatives or friends of friends .
To cut the story short ,we have to do some things even without enjoying it because we live in a world where everyone has their own role and sacrificing our own needs and desires we may show a benevolent behavior and help them
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, but, consequently, first, however, if, may, really, so, for example, for instance, i feel
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 6.0 15.1003584229 40% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 9.8082437276 82% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 13.8261648746 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.0286738351 82% => OK
Pronoun: 48.0 43.0788530466 111% => OK
Preposition: 33.0 52.1666666667 63% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.0752688172 37% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1302.0 1977.66487455 66% => OK
No of words: 284.0 407.700716846 70% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.58450704225 4.8611393121 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.10515524023 4.48103885553 92% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.3992765915 2.67179642975 90% => OK
Unique words: 167.0 212.727598566 79% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.588028169014 0.524837075471 112% => OK
syllable_count: 409.5 618.680645161 66% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.59856630824 73% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 7.0 20.6003584229 34% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 40.0 20.1344086022 199% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 131.591203726 48.9658058833 269% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 186.0 100.406767564 185% => OK
Words per sentence: 40.5714285714 20.6045352989 197% => OK
Discourse Markers: 14.1428571429 5.45110844103 259% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 29.0 5.5376344086 524% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 11.8709677419 42% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0 0.236089414692 0% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0 0.076458572812 0% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0737576698707 0% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0 0.150856017488 0% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0645574589148 0% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 20.4 11.7677419355 173% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 47.8 58.1214874552 82% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 16.5 10.1575268817 162% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.17 10.9000537634 93% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.12 8.01818996416 101% => OK
difficult_words: 45.0 86.8835125448 52% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 27.5 10.002688172 275% => Linsear_write_formula is high.
gunning_fog: 18.0 10.0537634409 179% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 3.33333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 30
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.