Traveling
People are living at an era when the young generations are allowed to enjoy vacation and relax after work. When it comes to choosing traveling alone or in groups, to some extent, probably the decision depends on one's character. Nevertheless, from a personal point of view, traveling in groups is a better option in terms of security, finance and pleasure. The reasons are elaborated in the following paragraphs.
Primarily, although people all aspire to release tensions and seek for pleasure in a trip, when they practically make schedules, security invariably stands as the most significant factor to consider. Whatever cities or counties they are about to visit, even the place entitled to be the most organized one, risks and riots loom. Paying a visit to an unfamiliar country alone has considerably increased the possibility that they may entrap themselves with possible danger, not to mention that they are stranger in the foreign land. Taking a colleague of mine who went to Hangzhou alone as an example, she was greatly at loose ends when a hideous robber threatened her to give all of her money, eventually she became deranged and flustered when hearing anything about trips or Hangzhou. Needless to say, that horrible encounter must exert irresistibly negative effects in her whole life. Conversely, this kind of concerns can be alleviated if people have travel companions.
Furthermore, traveling in groups can also help lighten the financial expenses when traveling as expenses can be equally shared by the group such as when hailing a cab, booking a hotel, reserving a meal, or even purchasing local specialties. After all, no merchants would refuse to give a slight discount on a group of people. Apart from this, when some fixed expenses are allocated to several people equally, the pressure could be lessened anyway. Moreover, possible embarrassments may be encountered when travelling. Hence, it is best to have companions especially when you need to take a picture or share emotions because of the wonderful experience. It is partly due to these intimate and warm contacts with friends that they can ultimately enjoy the travel journey.
Concerning all the factors mentioned above, the advantages of traveling in groups are evident. Security must take precedence over all other things when planning to travel.
- Advertising 76
- Television advertising directed towards young children (aged two to five) should not be allowed. 76
- whatif 3
- Traveling 86
- Some people like to travel with a companion. Other people prefer to travel alone. Which do you prefer? Use specific reasons and examples to support your choice. 80
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 134, Rule ID: AFFORD_VBG[1]
Message: This verb is used with infinitive: 'to travel'.
Suggestion: to travel
...x after work. When it comes to choosing traveling alone or in groups, to some extent, pro...
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Line 3, column 449, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... the pressure could be lessened anyway. Moreover, possible embarrassments may be...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, anyway, conversely, furthermore, hence, if, may, moreover, nevertheless, so, after all, apart from, kind of, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 15.1003584229 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 9.8082437276 112% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 13.8261648746 80% => OK
Relative clauses : 16.0 11.0286738351 145% => OK
Pronoun: 23.0 43.0788530466 53% => OK
Preposition: 51.0 52.1666666667 98% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1968.0 1977.66487455 100% => OK
No of words: 374.0 407.700716846 92% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.26203208556 4.8611393121 108% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.3976220399 4.48103885553 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.98989786814 2.67179642975 112% => OK
Unique words: 231.0 212.727598566 109% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.617647058824 0.524837075471 118% => OK
syllable_count: 621.9 618.680645161 101% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.51630824373 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 9.59856630824 52% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.6003584229 87% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 56.3841541526 48.9658058833 115% => OK
Chars per sentence: 109.333333333 100.406767564 109% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.7777777778 20.6045352989 101% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.77777777778 5.45110844103 124% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 11.8709677419 67% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 3.85842293907 207% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.231148170562 0.236089414692 98% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0836245746945 0.076458572812 109% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.105447499091 0.0737576698707 143% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.186355452856 0.150856017488 124% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0887275702138 0.0645574589148 137% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.7 11.7677419355 116% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 42.72 58.1214874552 74% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 10.1575268817 121% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.23 10.9000537634 121% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.69 8.01818996416 121% => OK
difficult_words: 120.0 86.8835125448 138% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 10.002688172 90% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 86.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 26.0 Out of 30
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