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Q. Children are facing more pressure from academic, social and commercial perspectives. What are the causes of such pressure? What measures can be taken to reduce it?
Pressurizing children through different perspectives such as academic, social and commercial has become miserable trend and has resulted in over-burden to them in very early stage of life. So,what can be the reasons behind this threat ? Although, major causes such as Inadequate education system and cut-throat competition are threatening, their effects can be reduced by implementing some solutions to it.
Firstly, unhealthy education system seems ruining its actual purpose as numerous subjects are provided to pupils and majority of them are unnecessary. As a result, students face huge burden during their school days. Secondly, a child's performance is weighed with his colleagues and friends where he has been judged and penalized accordingly that pressurizes them socially. Finally, children have become an income generator for many parents because their talent and skills are being utilised in commercial manner. The film industry is the prime example where children are showcased on-screen as per need.
Even though, there is ample burden on small shoulders, some stretegies can definitely restrict its detrimental effects. Education authorities should make the subject structure interesting by adding some gaming and sports activities which will definitely reduce unwanted pressure from them. In addition to it, some stress bursting techniques such as joining gymnastics and yoga classes can also be inplemented by youngsters so that their focus remains strong. As a result, they will remain healthy both physically and mentally.
To sum up, even though status-que of schooling system, social ranking approach and commercial aspect reflects extreme stress, the measurements such as interesting subject structure and stress bursting techniques are in place to overcome it completely.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 192, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , what
... to them in very early stage of life. So,what can be the reasons behind this threat ?...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
accordingly, also, finally, first, firstly, if, second, secondly, so, in addition, such as, as a result, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 13.1623246493 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 7.85571142285 102% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 10.4138276553 115% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 7.30460921844 68% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 19.0 24.0651302605 79% => OK
Preposition: 25.0 41.998997996 60% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 6.0 8.3376753507 72% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1537.0 1615.20841683 95% => OK
No of words: 266.0 315.596192385 84% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.77819548872 5.12529762239 113% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.03850299372 4.20363070211 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.87545825572 2.80592935109 102% => OK
Unique words: 182.0 176.041082164 103% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.684210526316 0.561755894193 122% => OK
syllable_count: 466.2 506.74238477 92% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.8 1.60771543086 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 5.43587174349 37% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.10420841683 190% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.76152304609 42% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 20.0 20.2975951904 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 55.4705529855 49.4020404114 112% => OK
Chars per sentence: 118.230769231 106.682146367 111% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.4615384615 20.7667163134 99% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.76923076923 7.06120827912 124% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 8.67935871743 58% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 3.9879759519 176% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.241418317073 0.244688304435 99% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0724750768066 0.084324248473 86% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0559902492355 0.0667982634062 84% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.139699785608 0.151304729494 92% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0874650425936 0.056905535591 154% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.0 13.0946893788 122% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 34.26 50.2224549098 68% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.5 11.3001002004 119% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 16.24 12.4159519038 131% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 10.33 8.58950901804 120% => OK
difficult_words: 96.0 78.4519038076 122% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 9.78957915832 107% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.1190380762 99% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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