Professional sports people are often idolised by young children. Some people think that they, therefore, have a responsibility to be good role models at all times for children. Do you agree or disagree?
Apparently, young children often admire talented and famous people especially sportsmen. That is why professional sports are thought to be good role models. Nonetheless, in my perspective, it is not necessary for them to set perfect examples at all times for admirers.
At the outset, professional sports always make effort to show their positive qualities in most of situations, which has profound influence on children's development. Besides, their enthusiasm in training and competing can become helpful source of inspiration for adolescents. As a result, youngsters will think and act more positively, they will love playing sports and they will harbour dream of being professional athletes like their idols. For instance, Mbappe - a very young and famous football player playing for PSG team used to idolize C. Ronaldo - a superstar of world footballer playing for Juventus team. When being asked, Mbappe said that Ronaldo was the main reason he decided to practice diligently to become a professional sport.
However, no one is perfect, so are the sportsmen. Being perfect role models sometimes makes them stressful so they do wrong things as a way of relieving pressure to return the true version of themselves. Rooney - a well known football player who used to play for Manchester United is a typical example. A few years ago, having been in charge of being a good role model all the time and having been scrutinized by the press made him so depressed that he drank a lot and fought with his teammates to release his bad mood. In other words, doing wrong deeds helps sportsmen avoid suffering from mental problems and survive in this harsh world.
To sum up, I think that it is unessential for the professional sports to set a good example at all times because nobody is perfect and normal people are those who have both good and bad aspects.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 9, column 91, Rule ID: MOST_SOME_OF_NNS[1]
Message: After 'most of', you should use 'the' ('most of the situations') or simply say ''most situations''.
Suggestion: most of the situations; most situations
...ort to show their positive qualities in most of situations, which has profound influence on childr...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
apparently, besides, however, nonetheless, so, thus, well, for instance, i think, as a result, in other words, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 7.0 243% => Less to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 1.00243902439 399% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 10.0 6.8 147% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 3.15609756098 253% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 24.0 5.60731707317 428% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 33.0 33.7804878049 98% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 3.97073170732 101% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1584.0 965.302439024 164% => OK
No of words: 308.0 196.424390244 157% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.14285714286 4.92477711251 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.18926351222 3.73543355544 112% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.75228010023 2.65546596893 104% => OK
Unique words: 192.0 106.607317073 180% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.623376623377 0.547539520022 114% => OK
syllable_count: 459.0 283.868780488 162% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.45097560976 103% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 1.53170731707 326% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 1.0 4.33902439024 23% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 1.07073170732 187% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.482926829268 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 3.36585365854 119% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 8.94146341463 168% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 22.4926829268 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 46.4885171007 43.030603864 108% => OK
Chars per sentence: 105.6 112.824112599 94% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.5333333333 22.9334400587 90% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.0 5.23603664747 153% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 1.69756097561 59% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 3.70975609756 323% => Less positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 1.13902439024 176% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.09268292683 24% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.365324276321 0.215688989381 169% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.103601382831 0.103423049105 100% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0760239369734 0.0843802449381 90% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.233269639629 0.15604864568 149% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0769643880679 0.0819641961636 94% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.0 13.2329268293 98% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 59.64 61.2550243902 97% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.51609756098 135% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 10.3012195122 96% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.53 11.4140731707 110% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.47 8.06136585366 105% => OK
difficult_words: 75.0 40.7170731707 184% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 11.4329268293 79% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.9970731707 91% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 11.0658536585 90% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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