Teachers should be paid at least as much as doctors, lawyers and business leaders.
Today many teachers are underestimated by the government although they work same as workload as doctors and business leaders, lawyers. Personally, I believe that working as a teacher is a more challenging thing to do compared to other professions because their result isn’t tangible as others also it exists just only in their student’s mindset but the most powerful weapon it is. I feel this way for two reasons, which I explore in the following essay.
First of all, they always nourish the new generation’s knowledge which is the most valuable thing for all humankind but their small amount of wage still remains as the previous century. A lot of people think that teachers always rest on special occasions such as Christmas, Summer vacation, Halloween, Thanksgiving.. etc. As a matter of fact, the impression is somewhat misleading, because during the all the breaks, teachers still have to do researches and preparation for the next semester or next week, not to mention writing piles of handouts that they will provide in classes. However, their great labour is still in vain because of the misleading conception of the public so it seems unfair to underrate their hard work comparing to other occupations. I assume that my uncle’s experience is a compelling example of this. She has been working as a teacher in kindergarten for the last 25 years also works about 10 hours a per day because of workload and complication of dealing with small children. Interestingly to say that it is a very burdensome thing to working in such an environment which is around 50 children are shouting, crying and babbling about something also as you may know that teaching to small kids is insurmountable work to an ordinary person. In addition to this, she was diagnosed by doctor having high depression, fatigue and many chronicle diseases. Therefore this challenging work must value equally as doctors, lawyers and business leaders.
Secondly, in terms of their educational backgrounds, it seems teachers shall be paid equally decent like other professions; since they all have to accomplish a higher education which is required much money from them also sweat for many years hard working before being qualified for their contemporary occupations. Furthermore, they have to additionally learn strict morality lessons such as how to properly communicate people or what to say in front of the children. Those strict rules always accompany them in everywhere even beyond the school’s area.
In conclusion, I assume that teachers play important rule identically in front of both the modern community and new generations. Therefore, I strongly believe that these numerous work stress and hard work must be evaluated by the government and society equally as others who same as having workload and output.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion: .
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Suggestion: Therefore,
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Message: Don't say 'equally as'. You can use either 'equally' or 'as' on its own. When comparing two nouns, use 'just as'.
Suggestion: equally; as; just as
...refore this challenging work must value equally as doctors, lawyers and business leaders. ...
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Suggestion:
...awyers and business leaders. Secondly, in terms of their educational background...
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Message: Don't say 'equally as'. You can use either 'equally' or 'as' on its own. When comparing two nouns, use 'just as'.
Suggestion: equally; as; just as
...evaluated by the government and society equally as others who same as having workload and ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, furthermore, however, if, may, second, secondly, so, still, therefore, i feel, in addition, in conclusion, such as, as a matter of fact, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 15.1003584229 113% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 9.8082437276 51% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 13.8261648746 101% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.0286738351 118% => OK
Pronoun: 43.0 43.0788530466 100% => OK
Preposition: 51.0 52.1666666667 98% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 8.0752688172 149% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2364.0 1977.66487455 120% => OK
No of words: 455.0 407.700716846 112% => OK
Chars per words: 5.1956043956 4.8611393121 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.61852021839 4.48103885553 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.99518270395 2.67179642975 112% => OK
Unique words: 256.0 212.727598566 120% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.562637362637 0.524837075471 107% => OK
syllable_count: 710.1 618.680645161 115% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 9.59856630824 125% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.6003584229 83% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 26.0 20.1344086022 129% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 70.5295344158 48.9658058833 144% => OK
Chars per sentence: 139.058823529 100.406767564 138% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.7647058824 20.6045352989 130% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.82352941176 5.45110844103 180% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.5376344086 108% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 11.8709677419 59% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.85842293907 156% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.122691530632 0.236089414692 52% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0407707233858 0.076458572812 53% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.061378525527 0.0737576698707 83% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0760407749429 0.150856017488 50% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.014240111983 0.0645574589148 22% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.4 11.7677419355 139% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 45.09 58.1214874552 78% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.4 10.1575268817 132% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.18 10.9000537634 121% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.95 8.01818996416 112% => OK
difficult_words: 116.0 86.8835125448 134% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 10.002688172 135% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 10.0537634409 123% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.247311828 137% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 86.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 26.0 Out of 30
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