Rules concerning youth are too strict (TPO 52)
Generation gap is a widespread issue all over the world. While old generations emphasize the traditions and abiding by rules, young generations desire to have a modern life and enjoy their freedom. Personally, I believe nowadays the rules that communities anticipate youth to abide by are too strict because they prevent them from being happy, they do not consider the needs, and they impede a novel society to grow.
One of the primary causes is that strict rules make young people sad. For example, taking part in parties is banned in my country. The government states that it is against religious rules. When a young boy does not attend parties regularly, he will become more and more depressed because every stage of life has its own hobbies, and when you, as a young boy, do not enjoy partying, you feel that you are squandering your life. This is a bad feeling that makes young people sad. Therefore, strict rules can make society depressed.
Another reason is that today rules do not consider young groups of society's needs. The main reason is that young people need to take part in political and societal actions, but the society denies this demand. As an example, in my country, people who are under eighteen years old can not vote in elections. I think this is unfair. Young people not only have the potential to analyze political issues, but also are the main owners of the future of the country.
Finally, strict rules prevent young people to make relationships. For example, last week two young girl and boy were arrested by the police because they were in a coffee shop. They were probably trying to get familiar with each other and so the police are preventing the society from grow in the future. The reference of police for such behaviours is law. Therefore, in order to change these situations, we must focus to give more freedom in law. Rules should not resist the young generation will to change.
For those reasons, I think that today communities have very fastidious laws against youth because the rules are against happiness, they ignore young generation's requirements, and they contradict the future society's grow. Hope to have a happier society in the future which does not suffer generation gap.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, if, so, therefore, while, for example, i think
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 15.1003584229 126% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 9.8082437276 71% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 13.8261648746 80% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.0286738351 109% => OK
Pronoun: 35.0 43.0788530466 81% => OK
Preposition: 38.0 52.1666666667 73% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1848.0 1977.66487455 93% => OK
No of words: 380.0 407.700716846 93% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.86315789474 4.8611393121 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.41515443553 4.48103885553 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.46442275216 2.67179642975 92% => OK
Unique words: 194.0 212.727598566 91% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.510526315789 0.524837075471 97% => OK
syllable_count: 583.2 618.680645161 94% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.59856630824 104% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 5.0 1.86738351254 268% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 2.0 4.94265232975 40% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 20.6003584229 107% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.1344086022 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 58.0271381367 48.9658058833 119% => OK
Chars per sentence: 84.0 100.406767564 84% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.2727272727 20.6045352989 84% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.0 5.45110844103 55% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 11.8709677419 42% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 10.0 3.85842293907 259% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.88709677419 143% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.114729475943 0.236089414692 49% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0388136172879 0.076458572812 51% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0618138532529 0.0737576698707 84% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.068545770273 0.150856017488 45% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0300417707319 0.0645574589148 47% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.1 11.7677419355 86% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 62.68 58.1214874552 108% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 10.1575268817 86% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.61 10.9000537634 97% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.64 8.01818996416 95% => OK
difficult_words: 76.0 86.8835125448 87% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.002688172 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.0537634409 88% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 20.0 Out of 30
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