modern games
Individuals believe that modern games do not help children to acquire a variety of abilities, while conventional games can provide favorable conditions to learning such skills. To a certain extent, I wholly disagree with this idea owning to three main reasons that I will explore in this essay below.
From an overall perspective, there is a wide range of reasons why people believe that modern games could bring several benefits for young people. To commence with providing a wide range of valuable skills. In evidence, the online game which is extremely popular in recent years could encourage players to practice not also problems-solving skill but also teamwork skill to achieve goals in their studies. Thus, applying those skills in practice lead them to become well prepared in the labor market in the future. Equally important is that modern games would be designed to serve educational purposes. To illustrate, these game could help students learn English as well as improve numerous useful skills such as time and money management. Therefore, it would enhance study efficiency and reduce the pressure of children. Lastly, the modern game would be able to supply players more options regardless of weather, location, sex, and physical activities. For instance, young people could learn basic skills like skiing in the winter, scuba ocean or space travel from several modern games at home. Consequently, this leads to young generation acquiring a variety of skill and knowledge in modern times.
In conclusion, I completely reject this view due to many convincing reasons that I mentioned above.
- online relationship 73
- Lots of young people nowadays have more information about worldwide celebrities in the music and movie industry than about well-known people in their nation 73
- school 11
- spend more time at family 73
- In contemporary, more and more individuals in many urban areas have little information about people who live around and lake the sense of community. What cause and solution for this problem ? 78
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 514, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Equally,
...ared in the labor market in the future. Equally important is that modern games would be...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, lastly, so, therefore, thus, well, while, for instance, in conclusion, such as, as well as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 5.0 13.1623246493 38% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 7.85571142285 115% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 10.4138276553 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 6.0 7.30460921844 82% => OK
Pronoun: 18.0 24.0651302605 75% => OK
Preposition: 37.0 41.998997996 88% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.3376753507 72% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1349.0 1615.20841683 84% => OK
No of words: 256.0 315.596192385 81% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.26953125 5.12529762239 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.0 4.20363070211 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.67401858 2.80592935109 95% => OK
Unique words: 161.0 176.041082164 91% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.62890625 0.561755894193 112% => OK
syllable_count: 420.3 506.74238477 83% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.76152304609 126% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 19.0 20.2975951904 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 36.9861640531 49.4020404114 75% => OK
Chars per sentence: 103.769230769 106.682146367 97% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.6923076923 20.7667163134 95% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.84615384615 7.06120827912 125% => OK
Paragraphs: 3.0 4.38176352705 68% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.67935871743 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.377236825418 0.244688304435 154% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.131332351866 0.084324248473 156% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.127678488125 0.0667982634062 191% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.20000881827 0.151304729494 132% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.14805431018 0.056905535591 260% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.2 13.0946893788 101% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 52.19 50.2224549098 104% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 11.3001002004 95% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.29 12.4159519038 107% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.39 8.58950901804 109% => OK
difficult_words: 78.0 78.4519038076 99% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.1190380762 95% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Minimum four paragraphs wanted.
Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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