The time people devote in job leaves very little time for personal life. How widespread is the problem? What problem will this shortage of time cause?
There is no doubt that people devote in job leaves little time for their personal life. Some people believe that this phenomenon is pretty widespread, whereas others think that this phenomenon is less common. In my opinion, I strongly believe that Extremely widespread among all of the developing countries and the shortage of time will weaken the family bonds., which will be supported by the following reasons.
The first and most important reason why it is extremely widespread among all of the developing countries is that people in those countries face a lot of competitions. To be more specific, the intense competition will led to people to do a large number of extra work to maintain the place in the workplace. For example, I worked in an IT company in China which has highly overworks. I always need to do some extra work to finish my tasks even when I go back to my home.
On the other hand, the most serious problem that the shortage of time will cause is that it will hinder family relationship for people. To be more explicit, people have no time to accompany with their parents or children if they spent more time on their job, which will cause a tense family relationship. For example, this can be established by a recent study by Oxford University which stated 74% of people think that employee spend more time on their job will cause the family relationship were hindered.
In conclusion, with all the above points, I strongly believe that people spend more time on their job and leave very little time for personal life is extremely widespread, because they need to face a large of competitions all the time. Moreover, this problem will cause the family relationship were hindered.
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Suggestion: lead
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Suggestion: many; numerous
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Message: Possible typo. Did you mean 'an' or 'IT'?
Suggestion: an; IT
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, if, moreover, so, whereas, for example, in conclusion, no doubt, in my opinion, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 10.5418719212 123% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 6.10837438424 180% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 8.36945812808 48% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 14.0 5.94088669951 236% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 32.0 20.9802955665 153% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 37.0 31.9359605911 116% => OK
Nominalization: 1.0 5.75862068966 17% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1418.0 1207.87684729 117% => OK
No of words: 294.0 242.827586207 121% => OK
Chars per words: 4.8231292517 5.00649968141 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.14082457966 3.92707691288 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.63362846456 2.71678728327 97% => OK
Unique words: 137.0 139.433497537 98% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.465986394558 0.580463131201 80% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 448.2 379.143842365 118% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.57093596059 95% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 4.6157635468 130% => OK
Article: 3.0 1.56157635468 192% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.71428571429 58% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.931034482759 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 3.65517241379 164% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 12.6551724138 95% => OK
Sentence length: 24.0 20.5024630542 117% => OK
Sentence length SD: 52.5793051812 50.4703680194 104% => OK
Chars per sentence: 118.166666667 104.977214359 113% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.5 20.9669160288 117% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.66666666667 7.25397266985 119% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.12807881773 97% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.33497536946 112% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 6.9802955665 57% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 2.75862068966 181% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 2.91625615764 103% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.457631784868 0.242375264174 189% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.177217002315 0.0925447433944 191% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.136988528569 0.071462118173 192% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.309140822301 0.151781067708 204% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.153856421328 0.0609392437508 252% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.5 12.6369458128 107% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 55.58 53.1260098522 105% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.54236453202 135% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 10.9458128079 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.97 11.5310837438 95% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.35 8.32886699507 88% => OK
difficult_words: 47.0 55.0591133005 85% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 9.94827586207 116% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.3980295567 112% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.5123152709 114% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 55.5555555556 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 50.0 Out of 90
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