Some young people are free in the evenings or have days off at school, which way can bring them the most benefit?
1、 to accumulate work experience by a part-time job or volunteering in a community
2、 learning to play a sport
3、 learning to play a musical instrument
Nowadays, parents have more and more worried about their kids left behind in the starting line. Therefore, when their kids have spare time, they always try to add something that is beneficial, from their perspective, into their schedule. Plenty of choices emerge out such as extracurricular classes, part-time jobs, community activities, sports, new musical instruments and so on. Are these activities really benefit children or are they just another burden to students? We should consider this question really carefully. As far as I am concerned, doing sports stands out among all those options.
To begin with, sports are undoubtedly beneficial to students physical health. As it is known to us all, exercise accounts for improving people’s heart capacity and strengthening the muscles. The same is true with the sports because students get trained from the process of running or leaping. Since students do not have time to go to the gym every day, sports come to be the best way to amend that absence. To illustrate, a report from several high schools which test their students by body examination combined with questionnaire, indicating that 34 percent students exercise or do sports regularly in their spare time, while 37 percent students just stay at home learning art or music and the students left go out doing part time jobs. Meanwhile, from the result of their physical examinations, those students playing sports mostly have higher level of heart capacity and less chronic disease. Although other students do not suffer torturing maladies, their body condition are less positive than their exercising counterparts. Hence, doing some sports is an ideal method to improve body condition theoretically or practically.
In addition, the pressure from the academic burden can be released by playing sports. During the training or competing, what students focus is the sport itself so they can temporarily escape from their academic pressure like upcoming finals or piles of assignments. In the end, they will be filled up with new energy when facing the challenges in school. Take me as a vivid example. Back to my high school life, I was facing the pressure of National College Entrance Examination. I was so anxious that I was afraid to stop learning even if I got only one day off every weeks. Suffering from this anxiety, I finally freak out and I cannot concentrate on assignment and always wondered off when having classes. I searched the help from my therapist and the paramount advise came that playing tennis every day off. At first, I was doubtful because I thought it was just a waste of time. But after two weeks, it turned out that I was totally wrong. When playing tennis with my friends, I completely immersed myself into competition instead of worrying uncertainties like what was I going to do if I failed the exam. Tennis refreshed my mind and injected more energy into my body, which really improved my efficiency. Therefore, eliminating pressure is another benefit that sports can bring.
After carefully analyzing all the cons and pros, we can confidently reach the standpoint that choosing sports as the after school activity is choosing wisdom.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: This word is normally spelled with hyphen.
Suggestion: part-time
...usic and the students left go out doing part time jobs. Meanwhile, from the result of the...
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Message: Did you mean 'I am'?
Suggestion: I am
...of worrying uncertainties like what was I going to do if I failed the exam. Tenni...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, finally, first, hence, if, really, so, then, therefore, while, as to, in addition, such as, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 21.0 15.1003584229 139% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 9.8082437276 71% => OK
Conjunction : 18.0 13.8261648746 130% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 11.0286738351 127% => OK
Pronoun: 56.0 43.0788530466 130% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 68.0 52.1666666667 130% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.0752688172 124% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2670.0 1977.66487455 135% => OK
No of words: 521.0 407.700716846 128% => OK
Chars per words: 5.12476007678 4.8611393121 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.77759609229 4.48103885553 107% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.75625537984 2.67179642975 103% => OK
Unique words: 289.0 212.727598566 136% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.554702495202 0.524837075471 106% => OK
syllable_count: 813.6 618.680645161 132% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 13.0 9.59856630824 135% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 8.0 3.51792114695 227% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 11.0 4.94265232975 223% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 28.0 20.6003584229 136% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 54.9275380731 48.9658058833 112% => OK
Chars per sentence: 95.3571428571 100.406767564 95% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.6071428571 20.6045352989 90% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.92857142857 5.45110844103 72% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 16.0 11.8709677419 135% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 3.85842293907 207% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.168099815714 0.236089414692 71% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0414832323004 0.076458572812 54% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0378524991994 0.0737576698707 51% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0877370267535 0.150856017488 58% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0405073057935 0.0645574589148 63% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.0 11.7677419355 102% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 53.21 58.1214874552 92% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 10.1575268817 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.42 10.9000537634 114% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.29 8.01818996416 103% => OK
difficult_words: 124.0 86.8835125448 143% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 10.002688172 70% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 80.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 24.0 Out of 30
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