Some people believe that when busy parents do not have a lot of time to spend with their children, the best use of that time is to have fun playing games or sports. Others believe that it is best to use that time doing things together that are related to schoolwork. Which of the two approaches do you prefer? Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
In this busy life many parents don't have much time to spend with their children. Some prefer to take advantage of time that they have to play games and have fun with their children, others believe that parents should use this time helping their little ones with their homework. In my opinion, I believe that parents should spend some time playing with their children.
First of all, spending some time playing with their child will stimulate their development. children develop their skills differently. Some develop them by interacting with their parents. parents have a great effect on their child's development. Thus playing with little ones and sharing their interest in specific game will lead eventually to stimulate their development in a fun interesting way. For Example, my 3 old son got bored from playing with himself and don't have new ways to play with his Lego set. When my husband returned from work and had some free time, I told him to play with his son, since I have homework to do. He played with him, showing him how to build a castle and how to transform this castle into a big house with huge backyard. As a result, my son after few days was able to play by himself with a lot of ideas with the same set. Thus, this 2 hours playing with his father have stimulate his imagination.
Secondly, playing with little ones will relief parent's stress. Parents after work usually are stressed, so playing with the children reduce this stress. For example, I had a bad day last week at work, and after I returned home my son asked me to play with him hide and seek. I was tired but after few minutes of playing with him, I forgot all the stress and the tiredness that I had, and I enjoyed the rest of the day.
As a conclusion, using the time that parents have to play with their kids will help stimulate children development, and it will relieve parents work stress.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, if, second, secondly, so, thus, for example, as a result, first of all, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 3.0 15.1003584229 20% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 9.8082437276 71% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 13.8261648746 80% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 11.0286738351 54% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 53.0 43.0788530466 123% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 53.0 52.1666666667 102% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1544.0 1977.66487455 78% => OK
No of words: 337.0 407.700716846 83% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.58160237389 4.8611393121 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.28457229495 4.48103885553 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.30009568778 2.67179642975 86% => OK
Unique words: 162.0 212.727598566 76% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.480712166172 0.524837075471 92% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 454.5 618.680645161 73% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.3 1.51630824373 86% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.6003584229 87% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 39.8333333333 48.9658058833 81% => OK
Chars per sentence: 85.7777777778 100.406767564 85% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.7222222222 20.6045352989 91% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.38888888889 5.45110844103 99% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.5376344086 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.389945192589 0.236089414692 165% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.155861427062 0.076458572812 204% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.119082781141 0.0737576698707 161% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.28205224779 0.150856017488 187% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.150622428583 0.0645574589148 233% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.5 11.7677419355 81% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 78.59 58.1214874552 135% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 6.8 10.1575268817 67% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.28 10.9000537634 85% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.87 8.01818996416 86% => OK
difficult_words: 50.0 86.8835125448 58% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 10.002688172 65% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 7.0 10.247311828 68% => The average readability is low. Need to imporve the language.
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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