The graphs below show the enrollments of overseas students and local students in Australian universities over a ten year period.
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use the following sample and its explanations to see how close you are to a band 9!
Contents
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evaluation Criteria
ielts writing tests are evaluated across 4 dimensions:
task Achievement – To what extent does the examinee address all parts of the task with a fully developed position, inclusive of fully extended and well supported ideas?
Coherence and Cohesion – does the examinee logically organise the information and ideas? is the entire essay cohesive?
Lexical resource – To what extent does the examinee use a wide range of vocabulary with accuracy? do they demonstrate sophistication regarding the use of lexical items?
Grammatical range and accuracy – does the examinee use a range of grammatical structures accurately?
The British Council (the administrator of the ielts) outlines 9 different bands of performance for each of the above dimensions here. Your scores in each of these dimensions are averaged to determine your overall band for your essay.
Let’s take a look at an example essay that scored as band 9 and then we’ll dig into each of these 4 areas to see why it received that score.
ielts essay sample question (1)
Doing an enjoyable activity with a child can develop better skills and more creativity than reading. To what extent do you agree? use reasons and specific examples to explain your answer.
ielts essay sample answer (1)
Parents throughout the world place spend time reading with their offspring to prepare them for school where their literacy skills are further developed; however, recent research suggests that focusing on reading at an early age can be detrimental, and participating in fun activities would be far more beneficial. I am a strong advocate of this approach, and the benefits of it will be covered in this essay.
A fundamental reason for this is that there is no biological age for reading, and pushing infants to acquire this skill before they are ready could have repercussions. For example, in the UK, many boys are reluctant readers, possibly because of being forced to read, and this turned them off reading. By focusing on other activities and developing other skills such as creativity and imagination, when they are ready to read, they usually acquire this skill rapidly. In addition, the importance of encouraging creativity and developing a child’s imagination must be acknowledged. through play, youngsters develop social and cognitive skills, for example, they are more likely to learn vocabulary through context rather than learning it from a book.
Furthermore, play allows youngsters to mature emotionally, and gain self-confidence. there is no scientific research w
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- The chart below shows estimated world illiteracy rates by region and by gender for the year 2000. 78
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- The chart below shows the different levels of post-school qualifications in Australia and the proportion of men and women who held them in1999. 56
- The graphs below show the enrollments of overseas students and local students in Australian universities over a ten year period. 11
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
furthermore, however, if, look, regarding, so, then, well, as to, for example, in addition, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 7.0 286% => Less to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 1.00243902439 798% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 21.0 6.8 309% => Less conjunction wanted
Relative clauses : 7.0 3.15609756098 222% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 38.0 5.60731707317 678% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 88.0 33.7804878049 261% => Less preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 49.0 3.97073170732 1234% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 6313.0 965.302439024 654% => Less number of characters wanted.
No of words: 772.0 196.424390244 393% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 8.1774611399 4.92477711251 166% => OK
Fourth root words length: 5.27113725669 3.73543355544 141% => OK
Word Length SD: 11.161934085 2.65546596893 420% => Word_Length_SD is high.
Unique words: 348.0 106.607317073 326% => Less unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.450777202073 0.547539520022 82% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 1549.8 283.868780488 546% => syllable counts are too long.
avg_syllables_per_word: 2.0 1.45097560976 138% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 1.53170731707 261% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 3.0 4.33902439024 69% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.07073170732 93% => OK
Conjunction: 5.0 0.482926829268 1035% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 5.0 3.36585365854 149% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 24.0 8.94146341463 268% => Too many sentences.
Sentence length: 32.0 22.4926829268 142% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 494.983373388 43.030603864 1150% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 263.041666667 112.824112599 233% => Less chars_per_sentence wanted.
Words per sentence: 32.1666666667 22.9334400587 140% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.125 5.23603664747 79% => OK
Paragraphs: 31.0 3.83414634146 809% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 27.0 1.69756097561 1591% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 3.70975609756 323% => Less positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 1.13902439024 176% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 10.0 4.09268292683 244% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0010375350381 0.215688989381 0% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.000677537931458 0.103423049105 1% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.00324935776992 0.0843802449381 4% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.000302856567566 0.15604864568 0% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.00165881373744 0.0819641961636 2% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 33.2 13.2329268293 251% => Automated_readability_index is high.
flesch_reading_ease: 5.16 61.2550243902 8% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 14.6 6.51609756098 224% => Smog_index is high.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 20.5 10.3012195122 199% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 30.76 11.4140731707 269% => Coleman_liau_index is high.
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.05 8.06136585366 112% => OK
difficult_words: 187.0 40.7170731707 459% => Less difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 35.0 11.4329268293 306% => Linsear_write_formula is high.
gunning_fog: 14.8 10.9970731707 135% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 11.0658536585 136% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Maximum four paragraphs wanted.
It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 11.2359550562 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 9
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