Some parents offer their school-age children money for each high grade (mark) they get in school. Do you think this is a good idea?
School grades are the most important measurements for assessing the students' performance at school. So the students should be encouraged to study their lessons well to get a high score. This often brings up a controversial question: How can parents exhort their children to study more? In my point of view, parents can reward their children by giving them money. This will kill two birds with one stone: Children can learn the value of both education and money. What follows is an elaboration of my viewpoint.
Children learn that education is very important for their future development through the process of getting rewards from their parents for their better school results. That is to say, when parents give their children money, they encourage their children to study more. Consequently, the children gradually get accustomed to studying, and finally learn the value of education when they become older. For example, when I was 7 years old, my father paid me some money for my full score in my report card. The next years, I tried harder to get more money and I gradually become interested in studying my lessons and gaining knowledge.
Earning and spending money is a very difficult task nowadays that should be learned in childhood. This can happen through offering money by parents to their children for their school grades. In fact, children learn to spend the money that they have earned through hard work for a good result in school. This is similar to a career situation that children will face when they become adults. For instance, my friend used to write her expenses and the money that her parents gave her when she was at high school. She learned how to manage her money and had a huge saving when she finished her high school.
Admittedly, payment of money for the best grades in school by parents poses some bad effects on children, including changing the children's priorities to money matters and making them to study the lessons superficially only to get a high score. Nonetheless, I believe that parents should reward their children's good results in school because new teaching and assessing methods can compensate the disadvantages of money rewards.
Decisively, if one assess the aforementioned merits of offering money to children for their high grades, one soon realizes that it is worth to pay the money. In fact, rewarding children with money can result in better future life because children gradually become interested in education, continue their education and face better job opportunities.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 69, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'students'' or 'student's'?
Suggestion: students'; student's
...mportant measurements for assessing the students performance at school. So the students ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
consequently, finally, if, nonetheless, so, well, for example, for instance, in fact, that is to say
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 15.1003584229 73% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 9.8082437276 112% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 13.8261648746 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 11.0286738351 127% => OK
Pronoun: 52.0 43.0788530466 121% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 49.0 52.1666666667 94% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 8.0752688172 149% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2111.0 1977.66487455 107% => OK
No of words: 419.0 407.700716846 103% => OK
Chars per words: 5.03818615752 4.8611393121 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.52432199235 4.48103885553 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.61166562364 2.67179642975 98% => OK
Unique words: 194.0 212.727598566 91% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.463007159905 0.524837075471 88% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 621.9 618.680645161 101% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.59856630824 115% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 44.4490077022 48.9658058833 91% => OK
Chars per sentence: 100.523809524 100.406767564 100% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.9523809524 20.6045352989 97% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.7619047619 5.45110844103 87% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 11.8709677419 118% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.421077651828 0.236089414692 178% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.148676009304 0.076458572812 194% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0897327779841 0.0737576698707 122% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.274200564456 0.150856017488 182% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0552697797084 0.0645574589148 86% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.3 11.7677419355 105% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 60.65 58.1214874552 104% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 10.1575268817 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.95 10.9000537634 110% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.56 8.01818996416 94% => OK
difficult_words: 79.0 86.8835125448 91% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 10.002688172 70% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 20.0 Out of 30
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