As we acquire more knowledge, things do not become more comprehensible, but more complex and mysterious.
Whether a tyro or a pundit , all struggle with understanding things. Maybe the struggle with things is what accounts for our savvy. Walking is a convoluted thing for babies, similar is the case with student dealing with calculus for the first time. Therefore, things are complex and mysterious from the very day we exist on the planet, so things do not become convoluted with time but the mentality or approach we take in dealing with things defines what we like to contemplate of it. It is an enlightening experience as it enables us to contribute in society and provide for ourselves.
We learn from our mistakes and experiences. Fear of the unknown is always going to eat us. Whenever we start or journeys to school we become more exposed to these feelings of complexity. But, when we truly are able to understand the thing, that is when we realize that nothing is complex and mysterious , effort is required to achieve things in life. initially the great footballer messi used to struggle with dribbling and scoring goals but through perseverance and practice he made history , the complexity is still high previously it was finding the net from close range but now it requires a high degree of precision to hit free kicks. Ultimately, its our mindset which makes us to believe in this chimera , that the things were easy and comprehensible in our past and now stakes are high so everything seems to get convoluted and difficult.
Acquiring knowledge is an aging process, as we age we are bound to take more responsibility, the stakes are high. To the great minds like Einstein's, this searching of solution to things becomes invigorating, the thrill which they receive after accomplishing things. Roller skating also seems complex untill we learn how to maintain our balance, but as we learn things new challenges are always waiting for us. In this case tricks on roller skates or roller skates hockey. As we learn, it makes us more prepared to understand the things which might have been difficult without any initial understanding. Therefore, the knowledge is aiding us to learn more complex things in a pellucid way rather than contradictory case.
Just like money is necessity to make more money, knowledge is required for becoming more enlightened. Without the command on the basic concepts of math like algebra, geometry and trigonometry it is preclude to study calculus. Therefore, basic knowledge is required to understand the advance topics in any field.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, may, so, still, therefore
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 24.0 19.5258426966 123% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 1.0 12.4196629213 8% => OK
Conjunction : 18.0 14.8657303371 121% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.3162921348 71% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 42.0 33.0505617978 127% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 56.0 58.6224719101 96% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 12.9106741573 39% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2068.0 2235.4752809 93% => OK
No of words: 413.0 442.535393258 93% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.00726392252 5.05705443957 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.50803742585 4.55969084622 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.82066586794 2.79657885939 101% => OK
Unique words: 217.0 215.323595506 101% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.525423728814 0.4932671777 107% => OK
syllable_count: 640.8 704.065955056 91% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 6.24550561798 112% => OK
Article: 4.0 4.99550561798 80% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.10617977528 129% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.77640449438 56% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.38483146067 68% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.2370786517 99% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 23.0359550562 87% => OK
Sentence length SD: 61.4144934034 60.3974514979 102% => OK
Chars per sentence: 103.4 118.986275619 87% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.65 23.4991977007 88% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.35 5.21951772744 45% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 12.0 7.80617977528 154% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 10.2758426966 88% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 5.13820224719 156% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.83258426966 62% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.304176463323 0.243740707755 125% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0895861688315 0.0831039109588 108% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0936148636032 0.0758088955206 123% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.183218128052 0.150359130593 122% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.059279540582 0.0667264976115 89% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.5 14.1392134831 88% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 51.18 48.8420337079 105% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 12.1743820225 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.78 12.1639044944 97% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.49 8.38706741573 101% => OK
difficult_words: 101.0 100.480337079 101% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 11.8971910112 92% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 11.2143820225 89% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.7820224719 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.