the bar chart below shows the percentage of Australian men and women in different age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010.Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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the bar chart below shows the percentage of Australian men and women in different age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Submitted by sjakhil on Sun, 08/18/2019 - 11:22

The bar chart illustrates the percentage of physical activity performed by the Australian men and women of different age groups.

Overall, the percentage of regular physical activity performed by men and women decreases as they grew old.

Firstly, the percentage of physical activity of men is higher than the women in the age group of 15-24, Whereas the percentage of physical activity in women is greater than men in the age group of 65 and over. The percentage of physical activity decreases in men from 52.8 percentile in the age group 15-24 to all time lowest of 39.5 in the age group of 35-44. Then it increases as the age progresses till 65 and above to 46.7 percentile.

Furthermore, in women the regular physical activity increase from 47.7 percentile in the age group 15-24 to the highest 53.3 percentile in 45-54 age group. However, it decrease slightly to 53% in the age group 55-64. Then It further Plunges to all time low activity for the age group 65 and above.

Finally, to conclude the percentage of physical activity performed by the women increases as their age progresses in men it decreases.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 7, column 136, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...oup 15-24 to the highest 53.3 percentile in 45-54 age group. However, it decrease...
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Line 7, column 170, Rule ID: IT_VBZ[1]
Message: Did you mean 'decreases'?
Suggestion: decreases
...entile in 45-54 age group. However, it decrease slightly to 53% in the age group 55-64....
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
finally, first, firstly, furthermore, however, if, then, whereas

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 2.0 7.0 29% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 0.0 1.00243902439 0% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 6.8 74% => OK
Relative clauses : 0.0 3.15609756098 0% => OK
Pronoun: 6.0 5.60731707317 107% => OK
Preposition: 38.0 33.7804878049 112% => OK
Nominalization: 0.0 3.97073170732 0% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 936.0 965.302439024 97% => OK
No of words: 191.0 196.424390244 97% => OK
Chars per words: 4.90052356021 4.92477711251 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.71756304063 3.73543355544 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.72455622087 2.65546596893 103% => OK
Unique words: 74.0 106.607317073 69% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.387434554974 0.547539520022 71% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 290.7 283.868780488 102% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.45097560976 103% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 1.53170731707 65% => OK
Article: 4.0 4.33902439024 92% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.07073170732 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.482926829268 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 3.36585365854 59% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 9.0 8.94146341463 101% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 22.4926829268 93% => OK
Sentence length SD: 44.1537717025 43.030603864 103% => OK
Chars per sentence: 104.0 112.824112599 92% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.2222222222 22.9334400587 93% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.11111111111 5.23603664747 136% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 3.83414634146 130% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 2.0 1.69756097561 118% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 2.0 3.70975609756 54% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 1.13902439024 176% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.09268292683 122% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.347592943665 0.215688989381 161% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.182972390857 0.103423049105 177% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.101149461192 0.0843802449381 120% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.247924129516 0.15604864568 159% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0719041727477 0.0819641961636 88% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.3 13.2329268293 93% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 58.62 61.2550243902 96% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.51609756098 135% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 10.3012195122 100% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.14 11.4140731707 98% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.16 8.06136585366 89% => OK
difficult_words: 30.0 40.7170731707 74% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 11.4329268293 127% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.9970731707 95% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.0658536585 99% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Maximum four paragraphs wanted.

Rates: 67.4157303371 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.0 Out of 9
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