A longer prison term as a way of punishing those who break the law is not as good as other methods. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
Imposing sentences is regarded as a way to punish those who commit serious crime and sometimes as a correctional method in many societies. It may has some advantages, but I hold that we should consider some other means to rehabilitate offenders.
Those who are in favour of stiff sentences may think a longer prison term has deterrent effects on both prospective and habitual offenders. One of the reasons is that being punished means losing freedom, which is a consequence rational people cannot take. In addition, having a crime record would have an adverse impact on their future life, including career life. Therefore, they would not commit crimes for the fear of being punished.
Despite this, we can consider community service as a means to combat crime. Community work can transform some law breakers, especially those who commit minor crimes, into law-abiding citizens. By contrast, if they are sentenced to prison, there is a possibility that they would commit crime again after the prison term, which poses a threat to other members in society.
In addition, we can also provide criminals with education and vocational training to improve their soft skills and practical skills. Juvenile criminals or first-time offenders may break the laws because of the lack of social experiences or low social status. If they could find employment, or they are aware of legal responsibilities, they may not commit crime. On the contrary, the prison will isolate offenders from society, preventing them from acquiring job skills and reintegrating into society.
In conclusion, I would argue that harsh penalty can serve as a deterrent, but it is not the best way to fight crimes. Through some other rehabilitation programmes, we would be able to build a happy and stable society.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, may, so, therefore, in addition, in conclusion, on the contrary
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 13.1623246493 84% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 17.0 7.85571142285 216% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 11.0 10.4138276553 106% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 7.30460921844 123% => OK
Pronoun: 25.0 24.0651302605 104% => OK
Preposition: 32.0 41.998997996 76% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.3376753507 72% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1510.0 1615.20841683 93% => OK
No of words: 289.0 315.596192385 92% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.22491349481 5.12529762239 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.12310562562 4.20363070211 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.84368021468 2.80592935109 101% => OK
Unique words: 173.0 176.041082164 98% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.598615916955 0.561755894193 107% => OK
syllable_count: 468.0 506.74238477 92% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 5.43587174349 147% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 0.809619238477 371% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 8.0 4.76152304609 168% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 16.0721442886 93% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.2975951904 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 25.5234967998 49.4020404114 52% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 100.666666667 106.682146367 94% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.2666666667 20.7667163134 93% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.66666666667 7.06120827912 80% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.38176352705 114% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.01903807615 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 8.67935871743 35% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 12.0 3.9879759519 301% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.162226506454 0.244688304435 66% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.051749622661 0.084324248473 61% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.056000272106 0.0667982634062 84% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0916764161034 0.151304729494 61% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0400854387377 0.056905535591 70% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.8 13.0946893788 98% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 52.19 50.2224549098 104% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 11.3001002004 95% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.0 12.4159519038 105% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.9 8.58950901804 104% => OK
difficult_words: 79.0 78.4519038076 101% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.1190380762 95% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.7795591182 121% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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