The growing number of overweight people is putting a strain on the health care system in an effort to deal with the health issues involved. Some people think that the best way to deal with this problem is to introduce more physical education lessons in the school curriculum. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
Nowadays, there is an increase in the obesity level, which has created immense pressure on the health care system. Few people suggest a solution that the educational system should indulge children in learning physical activity as there daily curriculum to avoid illness. I strongly agree with this remedy as it helps to reduce the obese factor.
A healthy lifestyle can be maintained with necessary steps, which involves implementing sports for children at the primary level. First and foremost, the educational system should include sports as a mandatory session in their daily activity in order to monitor their body from health issues. To illustrate, in China, pupils must attend their daily drill class before entering the classroom, which has diminished the health problems recently. Besides this, they can also obtain the quality of sportsmanship. As a result, it reduces the burden of the government under the medical services.
Another factor involves in creating an awareness of overweight through youngsters from their schooling institutions. Implementing the system of physical exercise in school not only cultivates an active body in kids but also for their parents and the adults in their family. For example, athletic students need special care and attention from their parents. Ultimately, adults have been revoked with a conscience of keeping an active body, which encourages their child to excel in sports. Hence, the fitness will be incorporated within the family by influencing the quality of life in the society and decline the problems faces by the regime in health sectors.
To conclude, when these methods are introduced in the education system. There will be a vast major of healthier people which makes the pressure on the medical institutions to decline because the society will be eradicated from illness.
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Nowadays, the number of…
Nowadays, the number of overweight people is growing minute by minute. This situation is quite alarming. In this condition,some people think that the best way to deal with this problem is to introduce more physical education lessons in the school curriculum. I agree absolutely.
Overweight is state which people become fater, slower than in the past.Morever, your health is also effected negatively. Reasons lead to that are fast food, soda, lubricating oil,chocolate, candy, sugar, sweet cake,.... All of them are delicous, appetiing, people cann't resist it easily. Addition, parents's overindulgement is also the reason make overweight increasing rapidly.
Overweight is not good for your health. It causes many diseases for healthy. Your physical appearances will be changed passively. You will fater, higher than once. From that point, you will become inferiority, depression.
To improve this statement, the first is improve your knowledge. Physical education lessons should be accepted in the school for students such as : how to protect your health, how to ameliorate your stature, the disadvantage of overweight...... Moreover, you should aware of management yourself to improve stature and preserve your health. Parents should limited indulge their children.
To conclude, when these ways are introduced in the school curriculum. The variety major of healthier, people will feel happier and more vigorous. Let's work together for public health
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, but, first, hence, if, so, for example, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 13.1623246493 53% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 7.85571142285 115% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 10.4138276553 48% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 7.0 7.30460921844 96% => OK
Pronoun: 16.0 24.0651302605 66% => OK
Preposition: 44.0 41.998997996 105% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.3376753507 60% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1559.0 1615.20841683 97% => OK
No of words: 289.0 315.596192385 92% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.39446366782 5.12529762239 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.12310562562 4.20363070211 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.71361473619 2.80592935109 97% => OK
Unique words: 169.0 176.041082164 96% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.584775086505 0.561755894193 104% => OK
syllable_count: 485.1 506.74238477 96% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 5.43587174349 55% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 16.0721442886 93% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.2975951904 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 36.9237051229 49.4020404114 75% => OK
Chars per sentence: 103.933333333 106.682146367 97% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.2666666667 20.7667163134 93% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.4 7.06120827912 62% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.67935871743 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.9879759519 150% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.189909906129 0.244688304435 78% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.062832501166 0.084324248473 75% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0349152188839 0.0667982634062 52% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.121626195263 0.151304729494 80% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.047581599755 0.056905535591 84% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.6 13.0946893788 104% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 43.73 50.2224549098 87% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 11.3001002004 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.98 12.4159519038 113% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.93 8.58950901804 116% => OK
difficult_words: 98.0 78.4519038076 125% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 9.78957915832 123% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.1190380762 95% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.7795591182 130% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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