The following appeared in a memo from the director of student housing at Buckingham College.
"To serve the housing needs of our students, Buckingham College should build a number of new dormitories. Buckingham's enrollment is growing and, based on current trends, will double over the next 50 years, thus making existing dormitory space inadequate. Moreover, the average rent for an apartment in our town has risen in recent years. Consequently, students will find it increasingly difficult to afford offcampus housing. Finally, attractive new dormitories would make prospective students more likely to enroll at Buckingham."
The recommendation made by the director of housing at Buckingham college about building new dormitories because they expect the number of students to double in the next 50 years might seem logical at first glance. However taking a critical look at the argument, one will realize it is based on unfounded assumptions about what is actually making students prefer staying in the college dormitories and also leave space for several unanswered questions. This argument is flawed and illogical.
First of all, the director readily assumes that the number of students enrolling at the college will continue to increase. Suppose, for example, a new and better college is built close to Buckingham college to compete with this college which in turn reduces the number of students that will enroll in the next few years to come. To strengthen the argument, the director should have provided evidence ensuring these problems will never arise.
Secondly, the argument also relies on the assumption that the major reason students consider when renting an apartment is the price it cost. Suppose for example the next crop of students that will enroll in this college from now on don't like to stay on campus and prefer staying off-campus is the cost of accommodation, this reason alone makes the conclusion flawed.
Finally, the argument also assumes that the dormitories provided by Buckingham college are the best option for students. What if another housing facilities which is far better equipped than what the college has available for students now and it's even cheaper in other to attract more student is built near the college to compete in student housing issues.
Thus, the argument is not completely sound. This is because the assumption backing the recommendation made by the director of housing of Buckingham college did little to support the conclusion and also leave room for several unanswered questions. To strengthen the argument the director should provide evidence to the following: he is sure that no new college will compete with Buckingham college for prospective students, the number of students will continue to rise, the major motivation for student picking accommodation is no price and finally there will be no future facility that will compete with their college for accommodation of students within the next 50 years.
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Comments
Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 13 15
No. of Words: 378 350
No. of Characters: 1929 1500
No. of Different Words: 167 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.409 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.103 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.636 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 154 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 126 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 74 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 35 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 29.077 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 16.055 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.846 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.408 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.628 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.084 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 233, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: don't
...will enroll in this college from now on dont like to stay on campus and prefer stayi...
^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, finally, first, however, if, look, second, secondly, so, then, thus, for example, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 19.6327345309 71% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 12.9520958084 93% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 11.1786427146 63% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 13.6137724551 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 19.0 28.8173652695 66% => OK
Preposition: 52.0 55.5748502994 94% => OK
Nominalization: 18.0 16.3942115768 110% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1965.0 2260.96107784 87% => OK
No of words: 377.0 441.139720559 85% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.21220159151 5.12650576532 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.4064143971 4.56307096286 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.68492932597 2.78398813304 96% => OK
Unique words: 170.0 204.123752495 83% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.450928381963 0.468620217663 96% => OK
syllable_count: 611.1 705.55239521 87% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 4.96107784431 60% => OK
Article: 9.0 8.76447105788 103% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.70958083832 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.22255489022 47% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 19.7664670659 66% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 29.0 22.8473053892 127% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 97.2642347471 57.8364921388 168% => OK
Chars per sentence: 151.153846154 119.503703932 126% => OK
Words per sentence: 29.0 23.324526521 124% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.46153846154 5.70786347227 148% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.25449101796 19% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.20758483034 73% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 6.88822355289 102% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.67664670659 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.268509777159 0.218282227539 123% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.105544785994 0.0743258471296 142% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.080748753217 0.0701772020484 115% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.172437542818 0.128457276422 134% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0616692099791 0.0628817314937 98% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.6 14.3799401198 122% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 42.04 48.3550499002 87% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.6 12.197005988 120% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.53 12.5979740519 107% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.13 8.32208582834 98% => OK
difficult_words: 73.0 98.500998004 74% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 12.3882235529 113% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.6 11.1389221557 122% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 11.9071856287 118% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 58.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.5 Out of 6
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