Topic: More and more people are suffering from health problems caused by a modern lifestyle which cannot be treated with modern medicine. Some people think that a return to traditional medicine should be encouraged. To what extent do you agree?
In the last recent years, there has been an increase in the number of people being prone to various health issues resulted from contemporary ways of life which advanced medical treatment can not cure. Other people believe that the revival of interest in traditional remedies should be strongly stimulated. From my point of view, I partly agree with these statements
On the one hand, in the daily life, people are at higher risk of facing a large number of chronically acute diseases such as cancer, diabetes due to various reasons . Firstly, the work environment has created an excessive amount of stress and pressure which can pose threats to the psychological conditions of workers. Moreover, the lack of physical exersises combining with the sedentary life style is a potential contribution to health impairment. Secondly, the excessive consumption of fast food and processed food instead of eating pre-made food possibly exerts detrimental effects on health condition. As a result, people are more vulnerable to many chronic diseases than the ones who have a naturally herbal and rooted lifestyle
On the other hand, herbal therapies should be motivated due to tremendously positive effects on people’s health. Firstly, traditional remedies are affordable and accessible. Particularly, many types of herbs and plants are available naturally and can simply processed or extracted through some stages. Therefore, patients can save more money if making use of traditional practice. Secondly, ancient treatments are widely perceived as safe and natural, that is not toxic. Specifically, because of the natural conditions and having no chemical components, people can avoid many serious allergies and side effects which may be caused by modern medical systems. For example, that many patients tend to abuse antibiotics when having common diseases such as cold treated easily by garlic may result in immunodeficiency
In conclusion, due to pessimistic habits in ways of living, people’s longevity is shortened by various chronic diseases. It’s highly recommended that people should adopt the most suitable medical treatment for themselves
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, firstly, if, may, moreover, second, secondly, so, therefore, for example, in conclusion, such as, as a result, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 13.1623246493 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 7.85571142285 127% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 10.4138276553 96% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 7.30460921844 123% => OK
Pronoun: 8.0 24.0651302605 33% => OK
Preposition: 43.0 41.998997996 102% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.3376753507 84% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1829.0 1615.20841683 113% => OK
No of words: 329.0 315.596192385 104% => OK
Chars per words: 5.55927051672 5.12529762239 108% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.25891501996 4.20363070211 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.96260749322 2.80592935109 106% => OK
Unique words: 201.0 176.041082164 114% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.61094224924 0.561755894193 109% => OK
syllable_count: 574.2 506.74238477 113% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 5.43587174349 55% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.76152304609 147% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 16.0721442886 87% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 20.2975951904 113% => OK
Sentence length SD: 65.1911240359 49.4020404114 132% => OK
Chars per sentence: 130.642857143 106.682146367 122% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.5 20.7667163134 113% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.0 7.06120827912 142% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.01903807615 120% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.67935871743 69% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.9879759519 125% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.248034061071 0.244688304435 101% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0760427265517 0.084324248473 90% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0586796317245 0.0667982634062 88% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.144568616842 0.151304729494 96% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0580391540396 0.056905535591 102% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.5 13.0946893788 126% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 39.67 50.2224549098 79% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.4 11.3001002004 119% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 15.26 12.4159519038 123% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 10.2 8.58950901804 119% => OK
difficult_words: 113.0 78.4519038076 144% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 9.78957915832 143% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.1190380762 111% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.7795591182 130% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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