ISSUE TOPIC: The real talent of a popular musician cannot accurately be assessed until the musician has been dead for several generations, so that his or her fame does not interfere with honest assessment.
How do you judge how good a musical talent is? Since talent is a statistical construct (unlike statistical measures such as height, weight and so on), it is usually very hard to accurately access it or worse still, judge whether one person's talent is better than someone else own. However, there is one test that every great thing or person must undergo to accurately and fairly judge it; the test of time. There are two very cogent reasons why the real talent of a popular musician cannot accurately accessed until the test of time; the focusing illusion and the bandwagon effect.
Simply stated, the focusing illusion posits that nothing in life is as significant as it seems to be while there is a huge focus on it. For a famous musician, the illuminating effect of their fame could cause the extent of their talents to be over-blown. Glaring mis steps that would not be allowed for someone who is not as famous as themselves, would be overlooked as some form of artistic genius or creativity. This is why the test of time is important. As time go on, the super excitement caused by the focusing illusion would wane and people can objectively look at the talent of the famous musician and judge it honestly. The focusing illusion almost entirely disappears when the talent of the said famous musician is judged by people who were never before adoring fans, usually those who came in contact with the person's work way after the person has died. This is perhaps why artists like Mozart have been judged to have great musical talents because even centuries after he has died, his work is still greatly appreciated and studied.
Similarly, the bandwagon effect is another critical reason why the true talents of a famous musician cannot be judged until generations after his/her demise. People are easily swayed by the opinions of other people especially when it comes to issues such as fashion, music and so on. It is why there are usually cyclic trends exists in these industry. One day, Rap is the most prominent music genre; another day, it is pop. Since a musician is usually famous because a lot of people likes them, we cannot easily ascertain if this is because the person has very great musical talents or the bandwagon effect is in motion. Psychology has even shown that by an effect called priming, people may be tricked into owning other people's subjective opinions and thinking it is theirs. However, just like the focusing illusion, the bandwagon effect also subsides with time and people who were not introduced to the initial bias can objectively judge how talented a musician really was, even generations after his death.
While it is true that the focusing illusion and bandwagon effect may not necessarily apply to very famous musician, one cannot fully know in advance who it applied to or not. It may also be argued that some people of the age of the musician must have seen something that allowed the focusing illusion and the bandwagon effect to kick in. However, one must note the effect of certain influences in terms of people or circumstances that could have allowed these behavioural theories to kick in. Very often than not, randomness plays a huge role in terms of which people and which circumstances will allow a form of music or a certain musician to flourish. Thus, only time can tell how truly talented a famous musician was. It has to be noted that many of the musicians we celebrate today were in their centuries, not popular.
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- ISSUE TOPIC: The real talent of a popular musician cannot accurately be assessed until the musician has been dead for several generations, so that his or her fame does not interfere with honest assessment. 58
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 9, column 337, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'this industry' or 'these industries'?
Suggestion: this industry; these industries
...ere are usually cyclic trends exists in these industry. One day, Rap is the most prominent mus...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, honestly, however, if, look, may, really, similarly, so, still, thus, while, as to, such as, it is true
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 39.0 19.5258426966 200% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 19.0 12.4196629213 153% => OK
Conjunction : 19.0 14.8657303371 128% => OK
Relative clauses : 18.0 11.3162921348 159% => OK
Pronoun: 43.0 33.0505617978 130% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 66.0 58.6224719101 113% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 12.9106741573 15% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2876.0 2235.4752809 129% => OK
No of words: 600.0 442.535393258 136% => OK
Chars per words: 4.79333333333 5.05705443957 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.94923200384 4.55969084622 109% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.46116277849 2.79657885939 88% => OK
Unique words: 263.0 215.323595506 122% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.438333333333 0.4932671777 89% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 934.2 704.065955056 133% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 6.24550561798 144% => OK
Article: 8.0 4.99550561798 160% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.10617977528 129% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.77640449438 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.38483146067 46% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 24.0 20.2370786517 119% => OK
Sentence length: 25.0 23.0359550562 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 54.7318589935 60.3974514979 91% => OK
Chars per sentence: 119.833333333 118.986275619 101% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.0 23.4991977007 106% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.54166666667 5.21951772744 87% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 7.80617977528 13% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 20.0 10.2758426966 195% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 5.13820224719 58% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.83258426966 21% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.217835055382 0.243740707755 89% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0687903466602 0.0831039109588 83% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0586134811991 0.0758088955206 77% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.142716439784 0.150359130593 95% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0116503996561 0.0667264976115 17% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.6 14.1392134831 96% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 46.1 48.8420337079 94% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.0 12.1743820225 107% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.8 12.1639044944 89% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.77 8.38706741573 93% => OK
difficult_words: 110.0 100.480337079 109% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 11.8971910112 118% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 11.2143820225 107% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 11.7820224719 119% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 58.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.5 Out of 6
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