TPO-23- Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
In today’s world, it is more important to work quickly and risk making mistakes than to work slowly and make sure that everything is correct.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
us">There is no doubt the happiness comes from various factor, such as work, social life, food, family, and so on. Some people claims their happiness is more affected by career than social life. However, as far as I concerned, jobs and social life play equal role in making people feel happy that can satisfy people’s different needs.
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us">On the one hand, a job provides income that satisfies people’s material needs. With the amount of money, people can fulfill their desire of shopping and improves living standard. For example, with the adequate money, we can live in a spacious apartment with well decorated furniture. we can travel around the world to experience exotic atmosphere. Furthermore, with the salary we can taste different kinds of foods whenever we have time. we can buy a luxury bag to fulfill our desire. With those advantages from our job, it is undoubtable to say that job have huge impact on our happiness.
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us">On the other hand, the happiness attains from social life can’t be ignored as well. Interacting with friends and participate the activities can enlarge our social circle rather than trapped in our individual life. For example, it can help us relieve our stress from daily life by hanging out with our friends. Moreover, maintaining social life can benefit our health. Since chatting and talking with people brings us better mood than stay alone by ourselves. With a good mood not only improves us body development but also brings mental health. Thus, with the above example, the social life also plays an important role in our happiness.
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us">In conclusion, the sources of happiness derive from fulfilling people’s needs. For me, jobs and social life combines together makes me feel happier. that is to say, in order to keep happiness in our life that continues our jobs and social life is essential.
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| 2020-01-22 | pooria | 80 | view |
| 2020-01-13 | Raziya | 76 | view |
| 2020-01-13 | sahar yarahmadi | 70 | view |
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| 2020-01-13 | sahar yarahmadi | 70 | view |
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, furthermore, however, if, moreover, so, thus, well, for example, in conclusion, no doubt, such as, on the other hand, that is to say
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 6.0 15.1003584229 40% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 9.8082437276 102% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 13.8261648746 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 5.0 11.0286738351 45% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 33.0 43.0788530466 77% => OK
Preposition: 43.0 52.1666666667 82% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.0752688172 37% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1647.0 1977.66487455 83% => OK
No of words: 310.0 407.700716846 76% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.31290322581 4.8611393121 109% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.19604776685 4.48103885553 94% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.83696610677 2.67179642975 106% => OK
Unique words: 174.0 212.727598566 82% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.561290322581 0.524837075471 107% => OK
syllable_count: 491.4 618.680645161 79% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 9.59856630824 63% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 11.0 4.94265232975 223% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6003584229 97% => OK
Sentence length: 15.0 20.1344086022 74% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 24.2187427419 48.9658058833 49% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 82.35 100.406767564 82% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.5 20.6045352989 75% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.15 5.45110844103 131% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 11.0 5.5376344086 199% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 16.0 11.8709677419 135% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.127209646729 0.236089414692 54% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0468155863768 0.076458572812 61% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0301427047264 0.0737576698707 41% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0784729887414 0.150856017488 52% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0164954638287 0.0645574589148 26% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.3 11.7677419355 96% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 56.25 58.1214874552 97% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 10.1575268817 90% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.22 10.9000537634 121% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.84 8.01818996416 98% => OK
difficult_words: 68.0 86.8835125448 78% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 10.002688172 75% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.0 10.0537634409 80% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.