TPO 24: Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
One of the best ways that parents can help their teenage children prepare for adult life is to encourage them to take a part-time job.
There is no shadow of doubts that in our modern era leaning social skills is of great importance as every individual should play his/her own role in society. In this regard, some people adhere to the notion that parents can help their children to prepare for adult life by encouraging them to take part-time jobs. I strongly concede this statement due to some convincing evidence. In the following paragraphs, I will cogently substantiate my viewpoint through some conspicuous reasons.
The most prominent point that everyone should consider is the fact that by this approach children gradually learn how to earn a livelihood which is very crucial for their future life. By experiencing a part-time job soon they will understand that nothing comes easily and they should strive for what they want and know the value of money. Also, they gradually learn some materials in the finance area. For instance, they will learn how to manage their budget and how to spend or save their money. undoubtedly It will have a positive impact on their future life. The studies have shown that people who had experienced a part-time job when they were children have higher economic intelligence in their adult life and are able to handle their finance and economic situation wisely as they have more experience.
The second noteworthy point coming to my mind is related to social skills. Learning how to make money is one aspect of a part-time job. By this approach parents also help their children to broaden their horizons about social life and also enhance their social skills. Having a part-time job help children to come out of their shell and interact with other people wisely. They will learn who to communicate with different people who have different attributes and temper. Hence, they will gradually have thicker mental skin which is very important in their adult life. In their future life, they would not be disappointed easily by other people as they have learned how to be patient and how interact with others. Also, these children will have more self-esteem and self-confidence, therefore, they would be able to endure setbacks in the future.
In conclusion, it seems reasonable to draw the conclusion that parents can help their children for their future life by stimulating them to have a part-time job as it helps the children to enhance their social skills and also become prepare for managing their economic life later. It is highly recommended that governments encourage parents to become inclined to this approach.
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- TPO17: integrated writing task 73
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- TPO 31 integrated writing task 73
- TPO 21 integrated writing task 47
- TPO 34: Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?Educating children is a more difficult task today than it was in the past because they spend so much time on cell phone, online games, and social networking Web site. 90
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 498, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Undoubtedly
...t and how to spend or save their money. undoubtedly It will have a positive impact on their...
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Line 5, column 846, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... able to endure setbacks in the future. In conclusion, it seems reasonable to dr...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, hence, if, second, so, therefore, for instance, in conclusion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 15.1003584229 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 9.8082437276 143% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 13.8261648746 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 11.0286738351 127% => OK
Pronoun: 56.0 43.0788530466 130% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 48.0 52.1666666667 92% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 8.0752688172 149% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2108.0 1977.66487455 107% => OK
No of words: 418.0 407.700716846 103% => OK
Chars per words: 5.04306220096 4.8611393121 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.52162009685 4.48103885553 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.58297991001 2.67179642975 97% => OK
Unique words: 196.0 212.727598566 92% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.468899521531 0.524837075471 89% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 654.3 618.680645161 106% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.59856630824 115% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 3.51792114695 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6003584229 97% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 58.0252315808 48.9658058833 119% => OK
Chars per sentence: 105.4 100.406767564 105% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.9 20.6045352989 101% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.6 5.45110844103 66% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 11.8709677419 118% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.299325593718 0.236089414692 127% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.101690729176 0.076458572812 133% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.107157122917 0.0737576698707 145% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.2254056636 0.150856017488 149% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0695049604811 0.0645574589148 108% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.8 11.7677419355 109% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 51.18 58.1214874552 88% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 10.1575268817 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.95 10.9000537634 110% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.1 8.01818996416 101% => OK
difficult_words: 92.0 86.8835125448 106% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 10.002688172 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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