More children in developed countries are becoming overweight. This is a serious problem for wealthy countries.
Discuss some causes and effects of this problem. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
In the last 50 years, an increasingly number of people are becoming fat or even obese and this trend is worring especially for many children, who are experincing all the drawbacks of being overweight since an early age. In this essay I'm going to discuss some of the causes and effects of this awful phenomenon.
Nowadays we are experiencing a pervasive advertisement about food, some of it specifically targeted to the youngest. Almost all children like the sweet and the corporations know that, so they develop specific publicitarian campaigns for this public, sometimes using testimonials who are appealing for a young public, such as football players, singers or even characters chosen from the cartoons. The effects of those unscrupolous campaigns are severe, because the child automatically associate the so-called "junk food" with a specific behaviour of his favourite "hero". For example, many fast-food chains design their mascottes in a fun way, depicting them as clowns to better engage the children and to create a constant "party athmosfere" associated with the food consumption.
Beside the food abuse, another important cause is the sedentary lifestyle. Just a few decades ago, the children were used to play a lot of active games, usually outdoor. In every neightborood, there were groups of children playing football, hide-and-seek, and many other games who make them active. Currently, the games are mostly electronic and played indoor. During my childhood, for instance, I was used to spend the summer holidays in the countryside, with my grandparents, and I was out to play with my friends most of the time; my younger cousins, on the contrary ar far more sedentary and, even they have many friends, they spend the time mostly at home.
To summarize, the two most important causes of the growing infant overweight are the power of the advertisement and the constant decline of the outdoor activities, the first is related with an unbalanced died, the second is responsible a lack of exercise.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion: who is a are
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Message: Simply use 'some'.
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Message: Consider replacing "in a fun way" with adverb for "fun"; eg, "in a hasty manner" with "hastily".
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Message: This verb is used with the gerund form: 'used to spending'.
Suggestion: used to spending
...uring my childhood, for instance, I was used to spend the summer holidays in the countryside,...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, if, second, so, for example, for instance, such as, on the contrary
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 13.1623246493 122% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 0.0 7.85571142285 0% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 10.4138276553 106% => OK
Relative clauses : 4.0 7.30460921844 55% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 21.0 24.0651302605 87% => OK
Preposition: 41.0 41.998997996 98% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.3376753507 48% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1734.0 1615.20841683 107% => OK
No of words: 326.0 315.596192385 103% => OK
Chars per words: 5.31901840491 5.12529762239 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.24917287072 4.20363070211 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.11923977001 2.80592935109 111% => OK
Unique words: 198.0 176.041082164 112% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.60736196319 0.561755894193 108% => OK
syllable_count: 535.5 506.74238477 106% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 5.43587174349 55% => OK
Article: 7.0 2.52805611222 277% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 9.0 4.76152304609 189% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 16.0721442886 75% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 27.0 20.2975951904 133% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 81.1423218111 49.4020404114 164% => OK
Chars per sentence: 144.5 106.682146367 135% => OK
Words per sentence: 27.1666666667 20.7667163134 131% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.16666666667 7.06120827912 87% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.01903807615 120% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.67935871743 69% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.9879759519 125% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.158731181575 0.244688304435 65% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0577388642875 0.084324248473 68% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0631414333629 0.0667982634062 95% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0976267120996 0.151304729494 65% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0717081565753 0.056905535591 126% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.2 13.0946893788 131% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 44.07 50.2224549098 88% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.8 11.3001002004 122% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.87 12.4159519038 112% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.38 8.58950901804 109% => OK
difficult_words: 91.0 78.4519038076 116% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 15.5 9.78957915832 158% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.8 10.1190380762 126% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.7795591182 130% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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