Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Young people should try several different jobs before they take a long term career.
There are two different views about young people’s jobs. One group believes that young people should find a long-term career because it helps them improve their abilities and express their loyalty consistency. Moreover, they believe switching from job to job can prevent their progressions and it is not ideal. But, another group’s opinion is that they can try several jobs before choose their final careers because they give them many precious lessons and also, the job’s condition and their major are more different. So, when they trying some jobs, it helps them distinguish between their tendency and their university major. In my opinion, try more than one job before take a final career is better than another. There are several reasons that can support my idea.
To begin with, taking different jobs can help young people to find out their interests. In addition, when the young switch their jobs to another one, it provides a special situation to figure out what kind of jobs match their habits. For example, imagine a student who graduated from college. He certainly thinks that he must find out a related job with his major. He never has a chance to understand his interests and habits. So, he makes his mind to hire in a well-known company and he does. But, after several months he knows this type of job is not his interested and he cannot show his ability. Thus, it makes him depressed and upset with his work.
Secondly, changing jobs give young people a chance to meet high ranges of people with various backgrounds. Therefore, these different job situations learn them valuable experience because they often are immature and they need to gain how can solve the problems. These jobs are like a teacher and learn the young arrange difficulties when they face with them. Moreover, they able to intensify their relationship network and in this process, sometimes they can have a certain good job. Thus, in different jobs, young people can increase their skills and social networks.
Finally, trying several different jobs not only helps young people to find their interests and favorite job but also help the young to equip themselves and spread their relationship network. So, young people should try various jobs to prepare for their long-term careers.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: The adverb 'often' is usually put after the verb 'are'.
Suggestion: are often
...n them valuable experience because they often are immature and they need to gain how can ...
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Line 7, column 17, Rule ID: NUMEROUS_DIFFERENT[1]
Message: Use simply 'several'.
Suggestion: several
... and social networks. Finally, trying several different jobs not only helps young people to fin...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, if, moreover, second, secondly, so, therefore, thus, well, for example, in addition, kind of, in my opinion, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 15.1003584229 60% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 9.8082437276 122% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 13.8261648746 116% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.0286738351 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 59.0 43.0788530466 137% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 37.0 52.1666666667 71% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1911.0 1977.66487455 97% => OK
No of words: 379.0 407.700716846 93% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.04221635884 4.8611393121 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.41224685777 4.48103885553 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.45484700857 2.67179642975 92% => OK
Unique words: 193.0 212.727598566 91% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.509234828496 0.524837075471 97% => OK
syllable_count: 563.4 618.680645161 91% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.59856630824 104% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 20.6003584229 107% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.1344086022 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 43.9087144723 48.9658058833 90% => OK
Chars per sentence: 86.8636363636 100.406767564 87% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.2272727273 20.6045352989 84% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.45454545455 5.45110844103 118% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 11.8709677419 126% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.328509970543 0.236089414692 139% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.110140483946 0.076458572812 144% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.074463758826 0.0737576698707 101% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.228499599181 0.150856017488 151% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0632162705361 0.0645574589148 98% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.9 11.7677419355 93% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 62.68 58.1214874552 108% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 10.1575268817 86% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.66 10.9000537634 107% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.48 8.01818996416 93% => OK
difficult_words: 72.0 86.8835125448 83% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 10.002688172 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.0537634409 88% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 66.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 20.0 Out of 30
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