Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Businesses should do anything they can to make a profit. Use specific reasons and examples to support your position."
some people assess successfulness of a business by the profit that it made, while others believe a company has to have restriction due to make more money. It's a debate between managers and owners of diverse range of companies all around the world. I personally, suggest making money is the first and foremost mission of a business. Hence, there is no doubt about the vitality of making money for a the job. I will bring some reasons to elaborate my point of view in the following lines.
first of all, nowadays everything in a way relates to the money. Therefore, being profitable for a work is not only important, but also, there is no hesitation about the influence of the money to progress in the future. The key feature of a suitable company is around it's financial matters, if the boss concerns about that, the company will be developing a in good pace. my personal example is an attractive one in this subject, when I started my own work as the manager of a charity, which was in fact a mimic of a charity, but indeed a kind of bank. everything was going smoothly to my final destination, to borrow people's money and close the charity! Unfortunately, I wasn't aware enough of the importance of the money for all the people, they didn't give anything to the charity because of being out of trust.
Secondly, making money is not a game for kids, it's the matter of being alive or not. Thus, there is no limitation by moral related things. such as, telling a tiny lie, spending money to buy someones opinion, etc. On the other hand, when you began to pay money to your employees, there is no talk about the delay of giving their salary. if you be late for them to pay, the doors are open for them to close.
As I mentioned before, there is no reason to take your thoughts on anything than making money when a beussiness started, because of the reasons I stated in my essay.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, hence, if, second, secondly, so, therefore, thus, while, as to, in fact, kind of, no doubt, such as, first of all, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 15.1003584229 119% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 2.0 9.8082437276 20% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 13.8261648746 43% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 6.0 11.0286738351 54% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 26.0 43.0788530466 60% => OK
Preposition: 52.0 52.1666666667 100% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1540.0 1977.66487455 78% => OK
No of words: 343.0 407.700716846 84% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.48979591837 4.8611393121 92% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.30351707066 4.48103885553 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.54123403982 2.67179642975 95% => OK
Unique words: 190.0 212.727598566 89% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.553935860058 0.524837075471 106% => OK
syllable_count: 504.0 618.680645161 81% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.59856630824 73% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 7.0 3.51792114695 199% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 20.6003584229 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 21.0 20.1344086022 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 54.5314917616 48.9658058833 111% => OK
Chars per sentence: 96.25 100.406767564 96% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.4375 20.6045352989 104% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.375 5.45110844103 172% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 13.0 5.5376344086 235% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 11.8709677419 51% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.100357456045 0.236089414692 43% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0338158234568 0.076458572812 44% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0337389842149 0.0737576698707 46% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0759894293646 0.150856017488 50% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0356640943253 0.0645574589148 55% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.4 11.7677419355 88% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 58.62 58.1214874552 101% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 10.1575268817 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.76 10.9000537634 80% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.9 8.01818996416 99% => OK
difficult_words: 70.0 86.8835125448 81% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.002688172 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.0537634409 103% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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