TPO 49- Independent writingDo you agree or disagree with the following statement?The ability to maintain friendships with a small number of people over a long period of time is more important for happiness than the ability to make many new friends easily.
It goes without saying that in todays' world, the importance of friendships in providing a joyful life is deniable. While some people believes it is better to keep a frindships for long term is resulted in more joy, the others hold the view that the ability to make many new friends conveniently is a key factor for the happiness in life. Personally, I am of the former group's point of view. The reasons substantiating my standpoint will be explored in the following paragraphs.
To begin with, a long friendship bring more intimacy between friends and intimacy has a pivotal role in the bringing happiness among the friends. To elaborate, the old friends have a lot of communal good memories together, In other words, they were being together in the sweets and bitters of the life which make a frindship so strong and intimate. As a result, when these friends spend time together thay can recount these memories and have a good time with each other. However, the new friends usually have no old memories together and they usually talk about current affairs which they are not usually exciting. As we can see, the good and bad memories which are existing among the old friends bring the warmth in their friendship which really necessary for the happiness.
In addition, The old friends who are the products of maintaining in a relationship, are more reliable. To elucidate, old friends feel a kind of bound among themselves which have a root in the long time that they have spent together and this strong tie provides a feeling among them that when they get stuck in a hard situation in their life they can ask for help from their friends. Thus, this sense which you can rely on your friend provides happiness in your life. For example, considering someone has monetary problems due to the loan that they have took from the bank. In this situation, they can ask their old friends for loaning some money; however, it is imposible to ask a new friend for loaning some money.
As shown above, considering all the points and reasons mentioned, one could concude that remain in a friendship in the long run bring more happiness for individuals. It is because that not only are there intimacy among them, but also they are more reliable.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 9, column 554, Rule ID: HAVE_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Use past participle here: 'taken'.
Suggestion: taken
...problems due to the loan that they have took from the bank. In this situation, they ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, however, if, really, so, thus, while, for example, in addition, kind of, as a result, in other words, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 15.1003584229 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 9.8082437276 71% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 13.8261648746 65% => OK
Relative clauses : 16.0 11.0286738351 145% => OK
Pronoun: 38.0 43.0788530466 88% => OK
Preposition: 53.0 52.1666666667 102% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1857.0 1977.66487455 94% => OK
No of words: 389.0 407.700716846 95% => OK
Chars per words: 4.77377892031 4.8611393121 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.44106776838 4.48103885553 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.54780296565 2.67179642975 95% => OK
Unique words: 189.0 212.727598566 89% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.485861182519 0.524837075471 93% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 557.1 618.680645161 90% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.59856630824 73% => OK
Article: 8.0 3.08781362007 259% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.94265232975 162% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 20.6003584229 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 24.0 20.1344086022 119% => OK
Sentence length SD: 56.4130968836 48.9658058833 115% => OK
Chars per sentence: 116.0625 100.406767564 116% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.3125 20.6045352989 118% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.875 5.45110844103 144% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.211319712681 0.236089414692 90% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0720185266969 0.076458572812 94% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0563826557256 0.0737576698707 76% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.134553293258 0.150856017488 89% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0376324507591 0.0645574589148 58% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.2 11.7677419355 112% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 64.04 58.1214874552 110% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 10.1575268817 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.68 10.9000537634 98% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.55 8.01818996416 94% => OK
difficult_words: 67.0 86.8835125448 77% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.0537634409 115% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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