Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
In order to become a financial responsible in adult, children should learn how to manage their own money at the young age. Use the specific reasons and example to support your answer.
Whether children should manage their money to wouldn’t have need to other is a debatable matter. Having enough money, is a crucial issue in every one’s life. It may seem exaggerated, at the first sight, one may find this contention sensible. Some people inclined that, children should deposit their own money in bank to learn how they should classify their requirements and manage their spending money. As far as I’m concerned, it is not as much as important for children to handle their fiscal situation. I will delve my stand point into two conspicuous reasons.
The first reason that makes me to hold this belief is that the world has been completely changed in these two consecutive years. Youngsters have a various preoccupation than their own parents. They concerned about the world problems. In fact, they have more tendency to committed communities activities. For example: environmental problems, poverty, refugees and etc. A lucid example is a conference about the global warming which has been held in Geneva recently. The number of juveniles attended and protested against governmental rules is incredible. Indeed, these days, juveniles attempt to expand the horizon of humanity and alleviate parochial thinking and replace it with modern one.
Another equally noteworthy reason to bear in mind is the intellectual revolution. Although it would never been attained unless technological development and information accessibility. To put it another way, young people should adapt themselves to use up-to-dated gadget. An examination which has conducted recently, I’ve read an article about, shows that students who have a far-reaching accessibility to the Internet are more creative and self-confidence rather others. As a matter of fact, student between 15-18 are more able to make a constructive decision in critical situation rather their same peer in the lack of welfare.
Even though, some keep encouraging adolescent to invest their money in a fiscal project due to favored, overall, I believe that, the ease and sense of belonging by improving perspective, makes it the best policy. Albeit, sometimes juvenile accused to waste their money, they should never let others to interrupt their life style and whatever they enjoy.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 360, Rule ID: AND_ETC[1]
Message: Use simply 'etc.'.
Suggestion: etc.
...vironmental problems, poverty, refugees and etc. A lucid example is a conference about t...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, if, may, so, for example, in fact, as a matter of fact
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 15.1003584229 79% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 9.8082437276 102% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 13.8261648746 65% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.0286738351 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 36.0 43.0788530466 84% => OK
Preposition: 41.0 52.1666666667 79% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.0752688172 124% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1914.0 1977.66487455 97% => OK
No of words: 353.0 407.700716846 87% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.42209631728 4.8611393121 112% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.33454660006 4.48103885553 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.93869173677 2.67179642975 110% => OK
Unique words: 226.0 212.727598566 106% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.640226628895 0.524837075471 122% => OK
syllable_count: 595.8 618.680645161 96% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.51630824373 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Article: 5.0 3.08781362007 162% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 20.1344086022 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 45.9944293186 48.9658058833 94% => OK
Chars per sentence: 91.1428571429 100.406767564 91% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.8095238095 20.6045352989 82% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.90476190476 5.45110844103 53% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 11.8709677419 67% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.85842293907 156% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.88709677419 143% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.181035895077 0.236089414692 77% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0447714228385 0.076458572812 59% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.060674751802 0.0737576698707 82% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0993944887689 0.150856017488 66% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0647782771842 0.0645574589148 100% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.5 11.7677419355 106% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 46.78 58.1214874552 80% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 10.1575268817 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.86 10.9000537634 127% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.75 8.01818996416 122% => OK
difficult_words: 119.0 86.8835125448 137% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 10.002688172 65% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.0537634409 84% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 86.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 26.0 Out of 30
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