Nowadays, many families have both parents working. Some working parents believe
other family members like grandparents can take care of their children, while others
think childcare centres provide the best care. Discuss both views and give your own
opinion.
Currently, many parents tend to be busy working, and they need to rely on someone else to
take care of their offspring. While some people think childcare organisations can offer the
best care, I would argue that it is better for children to be looked after by their grandparents.
On the one hand, it is believed that youngsters should be sent to childcare centres for some
reasons. The first one is that since those centres are professional organisations, their staff
are often well trained and therefore have good babysitting skills. For example, when a child
falls over and gets himself injured, a staff can react quickly and give him first aid.
Furthermore, children can have a chance to make friends with their peers when coming
there, which might increase their communication and language abilities. If they are looked
after by their family at home, they might feel a bit lonely.
On the other hand, I believe it is a better idea for grandparents to take care of their
grandchildren. Firstly, as grandparents have lived for many years and have brought up their
own offspring, they have much experience in raising children. For instance, they might
know how to calm the baby down when he cries. Secondly, grandparents are family
members, so they love their grandchildren more than other people do. As a result, they tend
to spend much more time and effort caring for their grandchildren compared to a childcare
staff member. Finally, youngsters looked after by their grandparents are likely to become
more family-oriented and appreciate the value of a happy family.
In conclusion, while there are some benefits of children being sent to childcare centres, I
believe they should be raised by their own grandparents.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
finally, first, firstly, furthermore, if, look, second, secondly, so, therefore, well, while, for example, for instance, in conclusion, as a result, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 13.1623246493 114% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 7.85571142285 127% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 10.4138276553 77% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 7.30460921844 96% => OK
Pronoun: 33.0 24.0651302605 137% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 34.0 41.998997996 81% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.3376753507 36% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1497.0 1615.20841683 93% => OK
No of words: 287.0 315.596192385 91% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.21602787456 5.12529762239 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.11595363751 4.20363070211 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.8590246204 2.80592935109 102% => OK
Unique words: 157.0 176.041082164 89% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.547038327526 0.561755894193 97% => OK
syllable_count: 432.0 506.74238477 85% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 5.43587174349 166% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 7.0 2.10420841683 333% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 16.0721442886 87% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.2975951904 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 27.5418049592 49.4020404114 56% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 106.928571429 106.682146367 100% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.5 20.7667163134 99% => OK
Discourse Markers: 11.8571428571 7.06120827912 168% => OK
Paragraphs: 20.0 4.38176352705 456% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 17.0 5.01903807615 339% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.67935871743 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.277741801406 0.244688304435 114% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.100402228045 0.084324248473 119% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0506079858998 0.0667982634062 76% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0860796085876 0.151304729494 57% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0506002895425 0.056905535591 89% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.4 13.0946893788 102% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 59.64 50.2224549098 119% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 11.3001002004 88% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.0 12.4159519038 105% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.43 8.58950901804 87% => OK
difficult_words: 51.0 78.4519038076 65% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.1190380762 99% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.7795591182 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Maximum five paragraphs wanted.
Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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