young people today have no influence on the important decisions that determine the future of society as a whole.
In the today progressive and sophisticated world where we live, those who are leader our country can build our future life. Leaders can revise our future and have significant effect on individuals specially young people. In this line of thought, some people believe that, nowadays youths are not allowing to make decision and determine the society. I, personally, agree with them for two main reasons, on which I will elaborate in the following paragraphs.
First of all, in this modern era, people choose their representative from old people and put them as a leaders, so youths they are not allowed to choose from crowed and make strong decision for future life. To be more specific, folks considerably trust on experienced ones and do not pay sufficient attention on youths. young people they are not in a position which can solve abstruse problem and make better path for future life. I can allude to a personal experience, when my grandfather lived his friend at the age of thirty was chose to be the leader of our city, but today the youngest leader of our city is forty years old. had he never lived on those days, he would never have did experience life as a leader.
Secondly, there is no right for young people to pole and express their notion about society todays. To further illustrate, in the past when people reach eighteen years old can choose leader, now lawmaker makes a sever rule that people just when reach the age twenty five can pole. leaders ponder, youths under age 25 cannot recognize qualified leader and they are on the effect of their emotion. Therefor, young people less than pervious could impact on their future.
To sum up, I assume that by passing time youth have a less opportunity to make a vital decision which change their future society. Not only today leaders choose among old people not young one, but also the age to choose leaders are upcoming. As for writers advice, I urge leaders involve youth decision on their important fundamental duties.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 71, Rule ID: WHO_NOUN[1]
Message: A noun should not follow "who". Try changing to a verb or maybe to 'who is a are'.
Suggestion: who is a are
...ophisticated world where we live, those who are leader our country can build our future...
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Line 1, column 306, Rule ID: ALLOW_TO[1]
Message: Did you mean 'making'? Or maybe you should add a pronoun? In active voice, 'allow' + 'to' takes an object, usually a pronoun.
Suggestion: making
... that, nowadays youths are not allowing to make decision and determine the society. I, ...
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Line 3, column 102, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[1]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'a leader' or simply 'leaders'?
Suggestion: a leader; leaders
...ntative from old people and put them as a leaders, so youths they are not allowed to choo...
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Line 3, column 321, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Young
...not pay sufficient attention on youths. young people they are not in a position which...
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Line 3, column 533, Rule ID: BEEN_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'chosen'.
Suggestion: chosen
...ved his friend at the age of thirty was chose to be the leader of our city, but today...
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Line 3, column 631, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Had
... leader of our city is forty years old. had he never lived on those days, he would ...
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Line 3, column 685, Rule ID: HAVE_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Use past participle here: 'done'.
Suggestion: done
...ived on those days, he would never have did experience life as a leader. Secondl...
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Line 5, column 282, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Leaders
...hen reach the age twenty five can pole. leaders ponder, youths under age 25 cannot reco...
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Line 5, column 318, Rule ID: CD_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun 'cannot' seems to be countable, so consider using: 'cans'.
Suggestion: cans
...le. leaders ponder, youths under age 25 cannot recognize qualified leader and they are...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, second, secondly, so, as for, first of all, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 15.1003584229 73% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 9.8082437276 102% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 13.8261648746 80% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.0286738351 100% => OK
Pronoun: 32.0 43.0788530466 74% => OK
Preposition: 40.0 52.1666666667 77% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1653.0 1977.66487455 84% => OK
No of words: 343.0 407.700716846 84% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.81924198251 4.8611393121 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.30351707066 4.48103885553 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.44355222563 2.67179642975 91% => OK
Unique words: 192.0 212.727598566 90% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.559766763848 0.524837075471 107% => OK
syllable_count: 525.6 618.680645161 85% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 9.59856630824 52% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.94265232975 162% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 20.6003584229 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 21.0 20.1344086022 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 37.5649437641 48.9658058833 77% => OK
Chars per sentence: 103.3125 100.406767564 103% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.4375 20.6045352989 104% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.6875 5.45110844103 86% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 9.0 5.5376344086 163% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.242580316659 0.236089414692 103% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0827348339797 0.076458572812 108% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0563812853367 0.0737576698707 76% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.158591520391 0.150856017488 105% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0254828753099 0.0645574589148 39% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.0 11.7677419355 102% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 58.62 58.1214874552 101% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 10.1575268817 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.68 10.9000537634 98% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.95 8.01818996416 99% => OK
difficult_words: 71.0 86.8835125448 82% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.0537634409 103% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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