Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
Nowadays, children rely too much on the technology, like computers, smartphones, videogames, for fun and entertainment; playing simpler toys or playing outside with friends would be better for the children`s development
palaying is one of the essential parts of every children in order to develop themselves. Developements in technology also affected children`s way of playing due to different consoles and videogames. I pesonally beleieve that children should use technology in order to progress mentally rather than playing outside. I feel this way fot two reasons which i am going to explain in the following essay.
Firs of all, children can develop their social behavior through group video games. By joinining different online videogames, not only they can find new friends, but also being able to attain certain kinds of social iterests in their future lives. An example can bring this notion home. When I was a child, i used to feel lonely, since my parents worked long daily hours, and i could see them only at night. i got depressed, and as a result my parents took me to a therapist. since we were living in a place where i was was the only child in neighbourhood, i could not find peers to play with. The therapist recommended my parents to buy me a computer to play different online games to find new friends. they bought me a computer, and i managed to find lots of friends around the world, and no longer i felt lonliness and deprssion. thanks to the new technologies, and also new online games, i was able to find new friends.
Moreover, technology will teach children logical thinking through different situations they experience. imagine a children through a battle game which they had to decide the best route to achieve a goal. in this line of thought, children will choose the most logical way to win a battle or ace a situation. Psychologically speaking, videogames will not only result in efficient, but also in rational decision making. As a result, this can help them in real life choices to choose the best possible option among a wide variety of ways. children will benefit from it in their future lives.
To sum up, i think that technology will not only help them to improve their social behavior, but also will be beneficial to auquire most eefiency from the present situation in their videogame and also real life.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, moreover, so, i feel, i think, as a result, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 15.1003584229 53% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 9.8082437276 133% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 13.8261648746 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 11.0286738351 54% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 40.0 43.0788530466 93% => OK
Preposition: 56.0 52.1666666667 107% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.0752688172 37% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1770.0 1977.66487455 89% => OK
No of words: 369.0 407.700716846 91% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.79674796748 4.8611393121 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.38284983912 4.48103885553 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.72819654383 2.67179642975 102% => OK
Unique words: 196.0 212.727598566 92% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.531165311653 0.524837075471 101% => OK
syllable_count: 543.6 618.680645161 88% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 8.0 1.86738351254 428% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6003584229 97% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 36.1735746091 48.9658058833 74% => OK
Chars per sentence: 88.5 100.406767564 88% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.45 20.6045352989 90% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.4 5.45110844103 62% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 21.0 5.5376344086 379% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0864064501311 0.236089414692 37% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0281519700274 0.076458572812 37% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0288601829815 0.0737576698707 39% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0524546303224 0.150856017488 35% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0340058208329 0.0645574589148 53% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.4 11.7677419355 88% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 61.67 58.1214874552 106% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 10.1575268817 90% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.56 10.9000537634 97% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.7 8.01818996416 96% => OK
difficult_words: 74.0 86.8835125448 85% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.002688172 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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