It is better to travel abroad to visit different countries when you are younger rather than when you are older
Nowadays, a prime and fundamental controversy about the issue whether the right time for a long journey to visit many countries is between 20 to 30 or is after 60. Some people would claim that going to see other places of the world as an old person is suitable. However, as well as I am concerned, I prefer to go to abroad in the best years of my life for two main reasons.
The first and foremost reason that must be taken into account is about the importance of gaining experiences to use them in the remain days of life. A relevant example can shed light to this assertion. 3 years ago, when I was visiting India, during a theater festival for kids the manager of the event helped me to learn about an ancient culture of India. Moreover, He explained me about a method of relaxation used by Indians for centuries. Thus, usually, I'm busy with many things to do but the relaxation means from India ables me to be calm and stressless.
The second reason that I prefer to illustrate is about the energy that a young individual has to find new thoughts and traditions by a trip. For instance, by the results of a recent research study at George Washington University, we can suggest that the best time to see and confront with new ideas, cultures and events is between 20 to 30. Furthermore, experts and psychologists mentioned that young generation is able to analyze phenomenon all around better than older people. On the other hand, a poll between students in the GWU concluded us to refer this notion that it is easier for a young person to make changes in his/her routines affected by other areas of the global.
To sum Up, I firlmy believe in the convenient influence of travel overseas to the young part of society for two main reasons. first, a young person can use new experiences of the trip in his/her life in the future. What is more, an individual who is less than 40 in age have sufficient energy to obtain and follow new patterns for his/her life.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, furthermore, however, if, moreover, second, so, thus, well, as to, for instance, as well as, to sum up, what is more, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 15.1003584229 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 9.8082437276 51% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 13.8261648746 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.0286738351 82% => OK
Pronoun: 29.0 43.0788530466 67% => OK
Preposition: 62.0 52.1666666667 119% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1613.0 1977.66487455 82% => OK
No of words: 357.0 407.700716846 88% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.51820728291 4.8611393121 93% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.34677393335 4.48103885553 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.55974288915 2.67179642975 96% => OK
Unique words: 205.0 212.727598566 96% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.574229691877 0.524837075471 109% => OK
syllable_count: 504.9 618.680645161 82% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 9.59856630824 42% => OK
Article: 7.0 3.08781362007 227% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 20.6003584229 73% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 23.0 20.1344086022 114% => OK
Sentence length SD: 39.2663837002 48.9658058833 80% => OK
Chars per sentence: 107.533333333 100.406767564 107% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.8 20.6045352989 116% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.8 5.45110844103 180% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.85842293907 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.07229303184 0.236089414692 31% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0220664338433 0.076458572812 29% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0323622920496 0.0737576698707 44% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0408056425479 0.150856017488 27% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.00737047201095 0.0645574589148 11% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.8 11.7677419355 100% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 65.05 58.1214874552 112% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 10.1575268817 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.23 10.9000537634 85% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.45 8.01818996416 105% => OK
difficult_words: 83.0 86.8835125448 96% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 10.002688172 135% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.0537634409 111% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 3.33333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 30
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