Some parents offer their school-age children money for each high grade (mark) they get in school. Do you think this is a good idea?
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
The debate on between giving money to the children or not when they get good grades seems very controversial. Nowadays, many are adamant that a myriad of things should be taken into consideration to examine a constructive and destructive facets of the issue. some holds the view that parents should give money their children to incent good habit on the children. however, some believe that its is bad approach to lure children to do something better for their study. From my vantage point. I concur with the later group and aver that children should not lure by the money to make them work hard in the study.
The first exquisite point to be mentioned is that children learn superficially the subject matter as their concentration only lies in getting the money. In order to hope of receiving money for good grade, they might study only exam point of view and has less knowledge in actual basis. This practice may become prevalent in the later life of the children where large knowledge and wisdom will required but, they have the same old mal practice. For instance, my brother got the money for the grade by my parents when he was in earlier high school. so, he focused mainly on how to get good grade and barely give look to the in depth knowledge; consequently, he have to suffer from that consequences in exam of public administration. According to him, he had done most portion of the question correctly, however, he struggled to the question which required depth portion. Had he study more passionately in the subject, he would have been selected at that time. Since, passion and interest in subject is necessary to make person prodigious in the certain area, money incentive only over shadow their passion with greed.
Secondly, another reasons that equally significant is that early money receiving of the children from the parents may spoil their life. children has instinct of curiosity and on receiving money they might pursue some things that may have more horrendous results in their life. they can use money for the potential buy of the drugs and other things. In addition, eye's of criminal may on them as they are much easier target to chase; consequently, they will be surrounded by the danger. for instance, when I was eight I was given money by my father and I sat on the bench holding with the money in my hand. Just few second, my parent had off eyes on me, one strange man stole my money and pushed me so hard I strucked my head. Thus, money should not be good things that children handle as it may cause some terror attack on the children.
To conclude, though money gives incentives children to work hard, it might not effective strategy as it has much more negative impacts on the child' psyche only focus on the money and they may have hard time due to it.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, consequently, first, however, if, look, may, second, secondly, so, thus, for instance, in addition
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 15.1003584229 93% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 17.0 9.8082437276 173% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 13.8261648746 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 16.0 11.0286738351 145% => OK
Pronoun: 56.0 43.0788530466 130% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 68.0 52.1666666667 130% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.0752688172 124% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2312.0 1977.66487455 117% => OK
No of words: 491.0 407.700716846 120% => OK
Chars per words: 4.70875763747 4.8611393121 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.70728369723 4.48103885553 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.47439004505 2.67179642975 93% => OK
Unique words: 243.0 212.727598566 114% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.494908350305 0.524837075471 94% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 704.7 618.680645161 114% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 14.0 9.59856630824 146% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 20.6003584229 107% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.1344086022 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 38.5905610863 48.9658058833 79% => OK
Chars per sentence: 105.090909091 100.406767564 105% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.3181818182 20.6045352989 108% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.68181818182 5.45110844103 86% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 13.0 5.5376344086 235% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 11.8709677419 76% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 10.0 3.85842293907 259% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.266500598387 0.236089414692 113% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.086199346812 0.076458572812 113% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0631772224083 0.0737576698707 86% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.160447628218 0.150856017488 106% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0537920932918 0.0645574589148 83% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.9 11.7677419355 101% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 66.07 58.1214874552 114% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 10.1575268817 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.33 10.9000537634 95% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.49 8.01818996416 93% => OK
difficult_words: 86.0 86.8835125448 99% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 10.002688172 75% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.0537634409 107% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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