Extreme sports such as sky diving and skiing are very dangerous and should be banned.
To what extent do you agree or disagree with this view?
In the modern era, an increasing concern for many people around the world is extreme sports.Obviously, there is a some strong claims for why some part of people believes the this sports could be not allowed by governments.However, also some part of people don’t agree with the other people’s idea.In this essay I will examine both sides of arguments and provide my overall opinion.
Generally speaking, the extreme sports such as sky diving, climbing, jumping with parachute or rafting becoming more popular for especially the young persons. And this popularity afraid of some part of people.They have a good reasons for the afraid. First of all, they believe this sports should be stop it. Because of the some accident happened more than once.For illustration, this some part of accidents caused to dead. However, the only way prevent to people is should be forbidden the this sports.Secondly, according to mostly young people the government should be allowed and support it the freedom for any kind of sports.I completely agree the young people idea’s.The sustain safely sports be able to just with the courses. If the each person who will attempt the this extreme sports take a course for learning the rules the bad reason such as an injury or dead be able to decrease.For examples, the countries such as Swiss are famous with the climbing. And also, number of disability is lowest than the other countries. The reason is obviously education.Secondly, people shouldn’t be afraid of doing sports. The encourage to this people could be more helpful during doing learning this things. For example, France has a really succeed to rafting in the wild river.Moreover, the instead of the hesitate to this sport they trying to explain the correct way for the everyone.
On the other hands, forbidden the anything which people likes could be cause chaos in the community. Instead of this people be able to learn the safely way from the volunteers.
In conclusion, i don’t agree the banned the any kind of sports but I support the courses for learning the right way for the highly dangerous sport. The should be do the what they want.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, moreover, really, second, secondly, so, for example, in conclusion, kind of, such as, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 13.1623246493 114% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 7.85571142285 102% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 10.4138276553 67% => OK
Relative clauses : 1.0 7.30460921844 14% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 21.0 24.0651302605 87% => OK
Preposition: 33.0 41.998997996 79% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.3376753507 36% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1657.0 1615.20841683 103% => OK
No of words: 327.0 315.596192385 104% => OK
Chars per words: 5.06727828746 5.12529762239 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.25242769721 4.20363070211 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.95826949043 2.80592935109 105% => OK
Unique words: 173.0 176.041082164 98% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.529051987768 0.561755894193 94% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 491.4 506.74238477 97% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 9.0 2.52805611222 356% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 16.0721442886 75% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 27.0 20.2975951904 133% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 116.938730396 49.4020404114 237% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 138.083333333 106.682146367 129% => OK
Words per sentence: 27.25 20.7667163134 131% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.75 7.06120827912 152% => OK
Paragraphs: 3.0 4.38176352705 68% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 27.0 5.01903807615 538% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.67935871743 69% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.9879759519 125% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.240800970524 0.244688304435 98% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.108727865352 0.084324248473 129% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0649469851907 0.0667982634062 97% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.175773752088 0.151304729494 116% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0571162083958 0.056905535591 100% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.1 13.0946893788 123% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 52.53 50.2224549098 105% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.6 11.3001002004 112% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.42 12.4159519038 100% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.65 8.58950901804 101% => OK
difficult_words: 76.0 78.4519038076 97% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 18.5 9.78957915832 189% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.8 10.1190380762 126% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.7795591182 121% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Minimum four paragraphs wanted.
Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.