Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?Educating children is a more difficult task today than it was in the past because they spend so much time on cell phone, online games, and social networking Web site.Use specific reasons and examples t
Day by Day, Technology is influencing to people life especially children. Although the technology such as games and social networking web site and cell phones keep them very busy, they can manage their time, as a result no consequences occur while using these kind of technology. In my point of view, if they spend too much time on games or cell phones or social network not even have bad effect on their education, but it can improve their knowledge to be improved via accessing to internet and get benefit from it. In the following, I am going to explain three main reasons to prove the idea.
Firstly, children can fetch more information through net regarding to their education. As a result, they can read more and more about the subjects which are thought in lecture, and sometime they can join the online classes through internet. For example, a subject like physic is very wide and if they just want to gather data from college is not enough, hence they can google the title and get through a huge data that is on the internet.
Secondly, playing game can improve their talent and it can help children to be a good problem solver. Therefor, children who play games, their mind is much mature than whom doesn’t play. For instance, there is a game called ‘seems’ which help children to learn how to earn money, and how they should improve their skills to get a sufficient job. So, this reason exactly shows that how much playing games can influence children’s life that can motivate them to find them to find out the way to success in life.
Thirdly, cell phone always help people to be in touch with each other especially children can use it through their education impact to be in touch with their classmate and professors for asking their questions when there is no time to go to meet them, as a result, this facility can help them to save their time in many aspects. To make this clear, sometimes students have doubt about some subjects and concepts before exam, so they can have communicate through cell phone with others to get data from them, also they can be online all the time and have some online discussion through cell phone with other classmate .
To sum up, technology developments such as these devices that mentioned above help children to use them to improve their knowledge than before and many resources are available for them to get data from all of these resources. Although, some times, these facilities take children time for nothing, but the advantages are much more than disadvantages .
- People today spend too much time on personal enjoyment doing things they like to do rather than doing things they should do 60
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- People today spend too much time on personal enjoyment doing things they like to do rather than doing things they should do 70
- People today spend too much time on personal enjoyment doing things they like to do rather than doing things they should do 60
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 135, Rule ID: WEB_SITE[1]
Message: Did you mean 'website'?
Suggestion: website
...ogy such as games and social networking web site and cell phones keep them very busy, th...
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Line 1, column 255, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'this kind' or 'these kinds'?
Suggestion: this kind; these kinds
...esult no consequences occur while using these kind of technology. In my point of view, if ...
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Line 4, column 312, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...acility can help them to save their time in many aspects. To make this clear, som...
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Line 4, column 443, Rule ID: HAVE_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Use past participle here: 'communicated'.
Suggestion: communicated
... concepts before exam, so they can have communicate through cell phone with others to get d...
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Line 4, column 617, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Don't put a space before the full stop
Suggestion: .
... through cell phone with other classmate . To sum up, technology developments suc...
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Message: Don't put a space before the full stop
Suggestion: .
...antages are much more than disadvantages .
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, hence, if, regarding, second, secondly, so, third, thirdly, while, for example, for instance, kind of, such as, as a result, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 15.1003584229 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 15.0 9.8082437276 153% => OK
Conjunction : 17.0 13.8261648746 123% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.0286738351 82% => OK
Pronoun: 46.0 43.0788530466 107% => OK
Preposition: 62.0 52.1666666667 119% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2090.0 1977.66487455 106% => OK
No of words: 440.0 407.700716846 108% => OK
Chars per words: 4.75 4.8611393121 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.57997565096 4.48103885553 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.43083728843 2.67179642975 91% => OK
Unique words: 220.0 212.727598566 103% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.5 0.524837075471 95% => OK
syllable_count: 637.2 618.680645161 103% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.59856630824 73% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.86738351254 214% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 20.6003584229 73% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 29.0 20.1344086022 144% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 76.6308902032 48.9658058833 156% => OK
Chars per sentence: 139.333333333 100.406767564 139% => OK
Words per sentence: 29.3333333333 20.6045352989 142% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.7333333333 5.45110844103 197% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.5376344086 108% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.223011659507 0.236089414692 94% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0848026123022 0.076458572812 111% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0488897722856 0.0737576698707 66% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.134146844999 0.150856017488 89% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0477719465467 0.0645574589148 74% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.6 11.7677419355 133% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 58.96 58.1214874552 101% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.2 10.1575268817 120% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.86 10.9000537634 100% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.13 8.01818996416 101% => OK
difficult_words: 85.0 86.8835125448 98% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 10.002688172 140% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.6 10.0537634409 135% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.247311828 137% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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