What I want to improve in my town
Landscape design is my passion and my actual field of study. Green spaces in towns improve quality of air and affect lives of citizens positively. The idea to elaborate one special park in my town have obsessed my mind. I will explore those reasons in the following essay.
To begin with, I feel lack of parks in my neighborhood. Every spring I collect nuts from one beautiful oak and grow up little oaks. Later, I present small trees to my neighbors to give them a chance to make concrete jungle a little bit grenny. I do it because my sister just have been born and there are no appropriate places to walk with her. I found out an abundant land nearby. It will be definitely fine if town administration allow me to develop a park project there. I am working on it currently. All of the above show how the park is necessary to me.
Secondly, new parks in a town will agitate people to go out from their flats. Positive changes in a town will help to reduce an internet addiction, encourage some to improve something else, gather neighbors together. For instance, the nearest park to my house is located in forty minutes by bus. Is not it too far? Many people from my neighborhood prefer to stay home on weekend and use their smartphones to relax from a work routine. I am sure this is because gray streets do not look attractive and basically It is not common for these people go for a walk. Absence of parks impact negatively on physical and mental health.
To sum it up, nurture is our mother, our source of health and inspiration. I believe we should attach great importance to sheer presence virgin or even human made landscapes around us. I claim with confidence nothing as much important in my town as new beautiful parks.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Reduce redundancy by using 'little' or 'bit'.
Suggestion: little; bit
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Message: Simply use 'all the'.
Suggestion: All the
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...e people go for a walk. Absence of parks impact negatively on physical and mental...
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...gatively on physical and mental health. To sum it up, nurture is our mother, our...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
if, look, second, secondly, so, for instance, i feel, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 15.1003584229 66% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 9.8082437276 51% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 13.8261648746 65% => OK
Relative clauses : 0.0 11.0286738351 0% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 39.0 43.0788530466 91% => OK
Preposition: 49.0 52.1666666667 94% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.0752688172 99% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1427.0 1977.66487455 72% => OK
No of words: 314.0 407.700716846 77% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.54458598726 4.8611393121 93% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.20951839842 4.48103885553 94% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.58394109692 2.67179642975 97% => OK
Unique words: 200.0 212.727598566 94% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.636942675159 0.524837075471 121% => OK
syllable_count: 458.1 618.680645161 74% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.59856630824 115% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 3.51792114695 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.94265232975 40% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 20.6003584229 107% => OK
Sentence length: 14.0 20.1344086022 70% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 30.3116048475 48.9658058833 62% => OK
Chars per sentence: 64.8636363636 100.406767564 65% => OK
Words per sentence: 14.2727272727 20.6045352989 69% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.04545454545 5.45110844103 56% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.88709677419 143% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.24053384005 0.236089414692 102% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0614718092218 0.076458572812 80% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0692849517618 0.0737576698707 94% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.155345470943 0.150856017488 103% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0873492916767 0.0645574589148 135% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 7.1 11.7677419355 60% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 65.73 58.1214874552 113% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.6 10.1575268817 75% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.46 10.9000537634 78% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.95 8.01818996416 99% => OK
difficult_words: 72.0 86.8835125448 83% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 5.5 10.002688172 55% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 7.6 10.0537634409 76% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 66.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 20.0 Out of 30
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