Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? If people have the opportunity to get a secure job, they should take it right away rather than wait for a job that would be more satisfying.
It goes without saying that in this competitive world where we live, people are struggling with various problems and have to work in order to improve the quality of their lives. In this regard, some people believe that they choose a secure job whether they like it or no, others hold the opposite view. Personally, I firmly concur with the former group. To substantiate my point of view, two significant reasons are explored in the following paragraphs.
To begin with, these days, living expenses are increasing so that people have to work that is opened. To clarify, in this world, people’s needs are increasing, and most of them are extremely expensive. Therefore, people have to make much money to pay cash to buy what they want. It is no matter they will be satisfied with this job, and money is the only purpose. Also, finding a desirable job can take much time. As a result, individuals prefer a secure job that is available to them. For example, my cousin is a tailer. He tells me that he wanted to be an accountant and thought this work would satisfy him. However, he had to be a tailer because of his family expenditure.
Secondly, people maybe do not know of which job really can satisfy them, so they probably are misled. To specific, some persons always think that their dream job is only work in which they will become successful and satisfied. So, they persist in finding that work rather than use available careers, and after a while, when they cannot flourish in the desired career, they go back and take another job and find this job as true love. For instance, I liked painting as a job and tried hard to be a famous painter, but I couldn’t. Then, I had to work as a designer, and now I love my job.
In conclusion, taking two reasons mentioned into account, I strongly believe that people do work any job even they do not like it. This is because not only do living expenses are increasing, but also individuals sometimes are misled about their true love job.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 102, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...hat people have to work that is opened. To clarify, in this world, people’s needs ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, however, if, may, really, second, secondly, so, then, therefore, while, for example, for instance, in conclusion, as a result, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 15.1003584229 126% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 9.8082437276 61% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 13.8261648746 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.0286738351 118% => OK
Pronoun: 53.0 43.0788530466 123% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 40.0 52.1666666667 77% => OK
Nominalization: 1.0 8.0752688172 12% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1634.0 1977.66487455 83% => OK
No of words: 355.0 407.700716846 87% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.60281690141 4.8611393121 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.34067318298 4.48103885553 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.49306755547 2.67179642975 93% => OK
Unique words: 194.0 212.727598566 91% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.546478873239 0.524837075471 104% => OK
syllable_count: 513.0 618.680645161 83% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 13.0 9.59856630824 135% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 6.0 1.86738351254 321% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6003584229 97% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.1344086022 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 41.3442559493 48.9658058833 84% => OK
Chars per sentence: 81.7 100.406767564 81% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.75 20.6045352989 86% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.55 5.45110844103 139% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.327154570975 0.236089414692 139% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0977968143555 0.076458572812 128% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0523945955942 0.0737576698707 71% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.204430599102 0.150856017488 136% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0441279578738 0.0645574589148 68% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.1 11.7677419355 77% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 71.14 58.1214874552 122% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.6 10.1575268817 75% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.1 10.9000537634 83% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.55 8.01818996416 94% => OK
difficult_words: 69.0 86.8835125448 79% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.0537634409 88% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 66.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 20.0 Out of 30
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