"Recently, we signed a contract with the Fly-Away Pest Control Company to provide pest control services at our warehouse in Palm City, but last month we discovered that over $20,000 worth of food there had been destroyed by pest damage. Meanwhile, the Buzzoff Pest Control Company, which we have used for many years in Palm City, continued to service our warehouse in Wintervale, and last month only $10,000 worth of the food stored there had been destroyed by pest damage. This difference in pest damage is best explained by the negligence of Fly-Away."
Write a response in which you discuss one or more alternative explanations that could rival the proposed explanation and explain how your explanation(s) can plausibly account for the facts presented in the argument.
According to the vice president of the company, the differnce in pest damage in two warehouse can reflect the negligence of Fly-Away, one of the pest control company. There are, in fact, different explanations regarding the calculation of damage, the judge of effectivity, as well as the condition in different warehouse to interpret that fact.
To begin with, there are a few alternative explanations for the fact that the worth of the damaged food in Palm is greater than that in Wintervale. According to the argument, the warehouse which is serviced by the Fly-Away conpany, was discovered that over 20 thousand dollars worth of food destroyed by pest damage; in the contrast, another warehouse served by another company only witnessed 10 thousand dollars damage . However, it is possible that the food store in these two cities are differnet. For example, if the food in Palm is far more expensive than that in Wintervale, the worth of food destroied in Palm will be greater even if Fly-Away are more dedicated in pest control. Therefore, we need more information regarding the type of food in two warehouses to exclude the alternative explanation mentioned above.
In addition to the value of the food in two warehouse, we also need to exam the rival explanations for the observed phenomenon about the difference in the worth of damaged food. Even if the value of the food is the same in two warehouse, we also need to know the total amount of the food. It is probable that there are a plethora of food in Palm but there are only 10,000 dollors worth of the food in Wintervale. If this is the case, the percentage of destroyed food related to Fly-Away is smaller than Buzzoff, indicating that Buzzoff is less effective in pest control.
Finally, even if the total amount and value of food in two cities are similar, it is still possible that the condition in two cities are quite different, leading to diversified difficulties faced by the two company. For example, if the pest in Palm is difficult to be elimated by pesticide, while the pest in Wintervale is easy to manage. Under such circumstance, it is hard for Fly-Away to manage as supreme as Buzzoff. Given the different condition, it is not safe to conclude that Fly-Away is neglacted. Therefore, we need to investigate whether the pest in Palm is hard to eliminate before we ascribe the large loss of food to the negligence of Fly-Away.
In conclusion, it is understandable that the president want to evaluate the service provided by the new pest control company. But we still need more information to find out whether the alternative explanation is true before we make judgement.
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Comments
e-rater score report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 4.5 out of 6
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 18 15
No. of Words: 452 350
No. of Characters: 2142 1500
No. of Different Words: 171 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.611 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.739 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.758 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 141 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 126 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 89 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 67 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 25.111 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 7.6 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.778 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.38 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.586 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.166 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 85, Rule ID: CD_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun 'warehouse' seems to be countable, so consider using: 'warehouses'.
Suggestion: warehouses
...ny, the differnce in pest damage in two warehouse can reflect the negligence of Fly-Away,...
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Line 3, column 420, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Don't put a space before the full stop
Suggestion: .
...nly witnessed 10 thousand dollars damage . However, it is possible that the food s...
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Line 5, column 45, Rule ID: CD_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun 'warehouse' seems to be countable, so consider using: 'warehouses'.
Suggestion: warehouses
...ddition to the value of the food in two warehouse, we also need to exam the rival explana...
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Line 5, column 228, Rule ID: CD_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun 'warehouse' seems to be countable, so consider using: 'warehouses'.
Suggestion: warehouses
...he value of the food is the same in two warehouse, we also need to know the total amount ...
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Line 7, column 328, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...de, while the pest in Wintervale is easy to manage. Under such circumstance, it i...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, however, if, regarding, so, still, therefore, well, while, for example, in addition, in conclusion, in fact, as well as, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 29.0 19.6327345309 148% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 12.9520958084 54% => OK
Conjunction : 3.0 11.1786427146 27% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 12.0 13.6137724551 88% => OK
Pronoun: 26.0 28.8173652695 90% => OK
Preposition: 79.0 55.5748502994 142% => OK
Nominalization: 15.0 16.3942115768 91% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2206.0 2260.96107784 98% => OK
No of words: 452.0 441.139720559 102% => OK
Chars per words: 4.88053097345 5.12650576532 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.61088837703 4.56307096286 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.87022920214 2.78398813304 103% => OK
Unique words: 183.0 204.123752495 90% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.404867256637 0.468620217663 86% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 716.4 705.55239521 102% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 4.96107784431 202% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 5.0 8.76447105788 57% => OK
Subordination: 7.0 2.70958083832 258% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 1.67365269461 60% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.22255489022 189% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 19.7664670659 91% => OK
Sentence length: 25.0 22.8473053892 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 47.82323419 57.8364921388 83% => OK
Chars per sentence: 122.555555556 119.503703932 103% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.1111111111 23.324526521 108% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.55555555556 5.70786347227 150% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.25449101796 95% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.20758483034 122% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 6.88822355289 102% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.67664670659 21% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.406834253665 0.218282227539 186% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.132757589838 0.0743258471296 179% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.075115077432 0.0701772020484 107% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.236538739428 0.128457276422 184% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0510291169765 0.0628817314937 81% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.1 14.3799401198 98% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 46.1 48.3550499002 95% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.0 12.197005988 107% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.32 12.5979740519 90% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.27 8.32208582834 99% => OK
difficult_words: 97.0 98.500998004 98% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 12.3882235529 117% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 11.1389221557 108% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 11.9071856287 126% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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