Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?People benefit more from traveling in their own country than from traveling to foreign countries
Throughout history, tourists and travelers have played prominent roles in all societies. Due to its paramount importance, many communities have tried to make some benefits for the passengers visiting their countries. Some people may hold the view that it is better to travel to different cities in their countries. However, some others may take the opposite stance and believe that it would be great if they visit a foreign country. With this in mind, I think it is more beneficial for us to visit our countries due to a number of factors, two of which are of great importance in comparison to others, which are elaborated upon.
First, there is a cyclic relationship between your travel and improvement in your country. Many communities make a high percentage of their budget from the people who are visiting their countries. All travelers will spend a lot of money to buy the ticket, reserve a hotel, visiting monuments, and eating different meals. Considering this, people can travel to their own country, and visit different places. By doing so, they can share their photos and videos on social media and invite people all over the world to visit their countries. By so doing, they can help the government increase its budget and provide a better life for its citizens. They can construct quite-a-few hospitals, shopping centers, and amusement parks, which help people to improve their mental and physical health. In addition, it provides a great chance for many businesses, such as airlines, hotels, and some open-air markets in some local bazaars. For instance, Turkey, one of the beautiful countries in the Middle east, provide different facilities for their people with the help of tourist’s industry.
Secondly, people not only can use a trip to relax and enjoy the time but also they can use it to make money. In this era, it is essential for all markets to make more money, while the price of the initial materials increases every day. People can visit different places of their country, and do market research to understand what they should produce in the near future to make more money. In addition, they can estimate the need of the market about what they produced before, and they can sell them in the market. While traveling to other countries for doing market research is not cost-effective, people can improve their profit by this trip.
All in all, people can make more benefits if they travel to their countries. They can introduce their countries as a place where many people can visit, and they can understand the need of the market for their own business, and make more money on their business
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, may, second, secondly, so, while, for instance, i think, in addition, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 15.1003584229 60% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 21.0 9.8082437276 214% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 17.0 13.8261648746 123% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.0286738351 63% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 48.0 43.0788530466 111% => OK
Preposition: 59.0 52.1666666667 113% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.0752688172 99% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2187.0 1977.66487455 111% => OK
No of words: 443.0 407.700716846 109% => OK
Chars per words: 4.93679458239 4.8611393121 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.58776254615 4.48103885553 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.56914231443 2.67179642975 96% => OK
Unique words: 208.0 212.727598566 98% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.469525959368 0.524837075471 89% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 667.8 618.680645161 108% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 8.0 1.86738351254 428% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 8.0 4.94265232975 162% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.1344086022 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 30.0643301202 48.9658058833 61% => OK
Chars per sentence: 104.142857143 100.406767564 104% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.0952380952 20.6045352989 102% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.14285714286 5.45110844103 94% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.5376344086 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 11.8709677419 118% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.85842293907 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.88709677419 143% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.229550317282 0.236089414692 97% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0853296714226 0.076458572812 112% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0640323410361 0.0737576698707 87% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.165636302783 0.150856017488 110% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.038644114126 0.0645574589148 60% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.4 11.7677419355 105% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 58.62 58.1214874552 101% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 10.1575268817 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.37 10.9000537634 104% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.14 8.01818996416 102% => OK
difficult_words: 97.0 86.8835125448 112% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 10.002688172 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.0537634409 103% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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