DO you agree or disagree Children ages 5 10 should be given cell phone

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DO you agree or disagree?
Children ages 5-10 should be given cell phone.

Technology has had a profound impact on our contemporart era. Modern innovations have led to spectacular breakthroughs in countless spheres, and have facilitated many of our daily works and tasks ,such as medicine and communications,therefore, I believe that children should not be allowed to their phones due to detrimental effects on their health and education, and I will explore that in te sebsequent eassy.

It is without a shadow of a doubt that cell phone have to kept away from kids due to negative effect on their well-being and health.Indeed ,electromagnetic radiation can trigger developmental disorders because their brains are still in thier formative stages,for example, adverse health problems may emerge from constant exposure to harmful radiation ,which include high rates of learning disabilities diseases such as ADHD, tumors and even cancers since their congnitive abilities are also affected,moreover , being in fornt of tiny screen for extended peroids of time can cause major vision issues because their eyes strain gazing at image presented ,consequently ,to ensure optimal welfare for our children , they should be away from their electronic devices.

Another equally silent point in corroborating my instance is that smart devices have many implications on their eductional careers ,in fact , such gadgets can be tremndous distractions if brought to school because they will be most likely to employ them at inappropirate time.For instance, rather pay attention and focus on teacher's valuable lessons ,many of them will start to utilize social networking sites ,such as twiteer and facebook because they are readily avialable ,and also play electronic games .This toxic atomsphere not conducive to knowledge acquisition because it will provoke their peers to imitate their disruptive behavior,hence ,from eductional perspective ,it is extremely important to prevent the younger generations from such harmful tools.

To sum up ,mobile devices should be away from children's hand due to terrible consequences that have on their welfare and their studies ,therefore,parents have to refuse purchasing this technology until their offspring are at more mature and responsible ages.

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, consequently, hence, if, may, moreover, so, still, therefore, well, for example, for instance, in fact, such as, to sum up

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 15.1003584229 93% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 9.8082437276 112% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 13.8261648746 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 11.0286738351 54% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 34.0 43.0788530466 79% => OK
Preposition: 47.0 52.1666666667 90% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1881.0 1977.66487455 95% => OK
No of words: 332.0 407.700716846 81% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.6656626506 4.8611393121 117% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.2685907696 4.48103885553 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.24635065945 2.67179642975 122% => OK
Unique words: 217.0 212.727598566 102% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.653614457831 0.524837075471 125% => OK
syllable_count: 583.2 618.680645161 94% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.8 1.51630824373 119% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 9.59856630824 52% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 3.51792114695 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 5.0 20.6003584229 24% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 66.0 20.1344086022 328% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 280.440082727 48.9658058833 573% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 376.2 100.406767564 375% => Less chars_per_sentence wanted.
Words per sentence: 66.4 20.6045352989 322% => Less words per sentence wanted.
Discourse Markers: 25.6 5.45110844103 470% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 30.0 5.5376344086 542% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 11.8709677419 25% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.85842293907 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.103270063924 0.236089414692 44% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0600323407822 0.076458572812 79% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0402098763112 0.0737576698707 55% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0725178795619 0.150856017488 48% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0278567485822 0.0645574589148 43% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 38.5 11.7677419355 327% => Automated_readability_index is high.
flesch_reading_ease: -12.43 58.1214874552 -21% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 17.1 6.10430107527 280% => Smog_index is high.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 31.4 10.1575268817 309% => Flesch kincaid grade is high.
coleman_liau_index: 16.49 10.9000537634 151% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 12.38 8.01818996416 154% => OK
difficult_words: 115.0 86.8835125448 132% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 20.0 10.002688172 200% => OK
gunning_fog: 28.4 10.0537634409 282% => Gunning_fog is high.
text_standard: 20.0 10.247311828 195% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.

So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:

reasons == advantages or

reasons == disadvantages

for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.


Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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