One of the most challenging problems in modern society is to have the most up-to-date skills for the workplace. For solving this, the government decides to give all adults over the age of 25 a training course to learn new skills. Do you think it is an effective way for the government to spend its money?
In a world of technological dominance, a complex work has become an easier task. However, to operate this technology is also need a expertise to run smoothly. Thingking about the resource conserving and profitable strategy, in my opinion, it would be better to train a existing employer about the emerging skills.
Trained exisiting human resource to adopt a new technology saves a economic resource of the nation. A former employed has gained a lot of working skills and experience to run the program and adding the extra skills on them will be very cheap approach to prepare the manpower for the particular job.While If more money invest on new comer only because of arrival of new technology, it will not be feasible at all. For running the company or any organisation, besides new technical skills, different other skills are required and, in fast pacing world, a new technology comes and forth in quick succession. So, to develop new work force having all the qualities in every time of changing technological approach is quite ridiculous.
As time is the valuable tools for suceeding in the organization, investing money in the old employee for training for new skills is an excellent idea. They already have an experience about the structure of the organization, its hiearrichial role, relevant other skills and coordination skills to achieve the goal of the company. If company invest money in new comer, perhaps they learn the new skills early, but need colossal time and resource to be equally adept as old employee.
In conclusion, a old employee has experience and knowlege of the organization and adding a new skills, they became a prolifient to operate their job. This idea will definitely make them skillful to meet the organization goal thriftly.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'needed'.
Suggestion: needed
...ver, to operate this technology is also need a expertise to run smoothly. Thingking ...
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Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
...to operate this technology is also need a expertise to run smoothly. Thingking ab...
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Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
...my opinion, it would be better to train a existing employer about the emerging sk...
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Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
...esource to adopt a new technology saves a economic resource of the nation. A form...
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Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: While
...are the manpower for the particular job.While If more money invest on new comer only ...
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Line 4, column 329, Rule ID: NEW_COMER[1]
Message: Did you mean 'newcomer'?
Suggestion: newcomer
...cular job.While If more money invest on new comer only because of arrival of new technolo...
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ordination skills to achieve the goal of the company. If company invest money in...
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Message: Did you mean 'newcomer'?
Suggestion: newcomer
...he company. If company invest money in new comer, perhaps they learn the new skills earl...
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ce to be equally adept as old employee. In conclusion, a old employee has experi...
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Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
...pt as old employee. In conclusion, a old employee has experience and knowleg...
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Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'skill'?
Suggestion: skill
...ge of the organization and adding a new skills, they became a prolifient to operate th...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, but, however, if, so, while, in conclusion, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 15.1003584229 60% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 9.8082437276 61% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 13.8261648746 80% => OK
Relative clauses : 0.0 11.0286738351 0% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 12.0 43.0788530466 28% => OK
Preposition: 36.0 52.1666666667 69% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.0752688172 124% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1484.0 1977.66487455 75% => OK
No of words: 292.0 407.700716846 72% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.08219178082 4.8611393121 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.13376432452 4.48103885553 92% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.90121657401 2.67179642975 109% => OK
Unique words: 161.0 212.727598566 76% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.551369863014 0.524837075471 105% => OK
syllable_count: 471.6 618.680645161 76% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 9.59856630824 63% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 20.6003584229 58% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 24.0 20.1344086022 119% => OK
Sentence length SD: 62.1639297878 48.9658058833 127% => OK
Chars per sentence: 123.666666667 100.406767564 123% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.3333333333 20.6045352989 118% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.0 5.45110844103 110% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 11.0 5.5376344086 199% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 11.8709677419 59% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.211167683843 0.236089414692 89% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0793875212951 0.076458572812 104% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0571699188029 0.0737576698707 78% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.121488731734 0.150856017488 81% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0732433372444 0.0645574589148 113% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.7 11.7677419355 125% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 47.12 58.1214874552 81% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 10.1575268817 125% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.48 10.9000537634 114% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.94 8.01818996416 111% => OK
difficult_words: 76.0 86.8835125448 87% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 10.002688172 115% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.0537634409 115% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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