The following is a recommendation from the Board of Directors of Monarch Books.
"We recommend that Monarch Books open a café in its store. Monarch, having been in business at the same location for more than twenty years, has a large customer base because it is known for its wide selection of books on all subjects. Clearly, opening the café would attract more customers. Space could be made for the café by discontinuing the children's book section, which will probably become less popular given that the most recent national census indicated a significant decline in the percentage of the population under age ten. Opening a café will allow Monarch to attract more customers and better compete with Regal Books, which recently opened its own café."
Write a response in which you discuss what questions would need to be answered in order to decide whether the recommendation is likely to have the predicted result. Be sure to explain how the answers to these questions would help to evaluate the recommendation.
In the given passage, the writer recommends opening a café in the bookstore instead of maintaining the children’s book section. It explains that with the decline of young ages under ten, the significance of the section will decrease, and with a café, the competitiveness to other bookstores will be better. However, in order to certify the recommendation, several questions have to be answered.
Firstly, how many portions of customers visit the children’s book section? The way how the bookstore has maintained its large customers was its wide selection of books. If the bookstore opens a café at the expense of the children’s book section, it will need to give up the customers of the section. In order to examine the legitimacy of the idea, the ratio of customers in the children’s book section has to be considered. If the ratio is significantly high compared to other sections, despite the decline of young children, the sales of children’s books can still maintain a large portion of the bookstore’s entire sales. In this case, replacing the children’s book section with a café can result in losing the customers of children’s books and reducing the bookstore’s sales. It is totally obviated from what the recommendation was aiming for.
Secondly, has the number of visitors to Regal Books increased since they opened a café in the bookstore? Providing a place to read books bought from the bookstore sounds nice, however, how it really works can be different from the expectation. A café is a place to gather and talk together with others rather than a quiet place such as a library. For this nature of café, not many people might be attracted to visit the bookstore solely due to the existence of a cafe. If there was no significant increase in the number of Regal Books’ customers, it means it did not work as expected. In this case, the recommendation cannot hold water.
To sum up, the recommendation, as it stands now, is significantly flawed due to its reliance on unwarranted assumptions. If the aspects mentioned above cannot thoroughly be explained, the recommendation will be able to not obtain its veracity.
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Comments
e-rater score report
One more argument wanted.
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 11 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 2 2
No. of Sentences: 18 15
No. of Words: 357 350
No. of Characters: 1725 1500
No. of Different Words: 168 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.347 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.832 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.921 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 115 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 92 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 68 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 51 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 19.833 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 6.212 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.556 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.344 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.344 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.09 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 1 5
Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, firstly, however, if, really, second, secondly, so, still, as to, such as, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 19.6327345309 71% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 12.9520958084 85% => OK
Conjunction : 3.0 11.1786427146 27% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 1.0 13.6137724551 7% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 16.0 28.8173652695 56% => OK
Preposition: 58.0 55.5748502994 104% => OK
Nominalization: 18.0 16.3942115768 110% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1801.0 2260.96107784 80% => OK
No of words: 357.0 441.139720559 81% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.04481792717 5.12650576532 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.34677393335 4.56307096286 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.11669433096 2.78398813304 112% => OK
Unique words: 172.0 204.123752495 84% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.481792717087 0.468620217663 103% => OK
syllable_count: 546.3 705.55239521 77% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 4.96107784431 81% => OK
Article: 10.0 8.76447105788 114% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 2.70958083832 185% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.67365269461 60% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.22255489022 166% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 19.7664670659 91% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 22.8473053892 83% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 36.8785125969 57.8364921388 64% => OK
Chars per sentence: 100.055555556 119.503703932 84% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.8333333333 23.324526521 85% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.05555555556 5.70786347227 89% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 5.15768463074 78% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 0.0 5.25449101796 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.20758483034 73% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 6.88822355289 15% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 11.0 4.67664670659 235% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.202079706713 0.218282227539 93% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0761206395077 0.0743258471296 102% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0400335280288 0.0701772020484 57% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.119837206887 0.128457276422 93% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0445327228375 0.0628817314937 71% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.2 14.3799401198 85% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 60.65 48.3550499002 125% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 12.197005988 78% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.95 12.5979740519 95% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.34 8.32208582834 100% => OK
difficult_words: 85.0 98.500998004 86% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 12.3882235529 65% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 11.1389221557 86% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 11.9071856287 84% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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