The best way for a society to prepare its young people for leadership in government, industry, or other fields is by instilling in them a sense of cooperation, not competition.
The statement takes cooperation as a central value to a successful leadership and regards competition as an opposite one. However, in my point of view, cooperation and competition can happen at the same time if manage properly.
The value of cooperation cannot be emphasized more during the time we grow up. Since childhood, kids are taught to cooperate with brothers or sisters in order to win the games or to clean up houses more efficiently by doing together. After getting into school, there are always some assignments focuses on teamwork. Teachers mean to bring students significant abilities about respecting different viewpoints and figuring out a common solution trough discussion. Even in the work place, cooperation seems to be a core value within most of the companies. Boss often expects all of the employees to work for a same goal. Admittedly, this process is no doubt a required lesson to young people before they can become successful leaders because we expect a good leader to be able to listen to others.
Yet, we can barely improve without competition. Children crave to win games, so they practice their skill. Students want to rank high, so they study hard. Workers strive for high salary, so they perform impressively. Some detractors state that competition may possibly result in argument. Or, some people may even try to beat others by all means. However, if people compete in a proper way, competition has extreme power to bring out people's best. Another crucial characteristic of a good leader is that he or she works dedicatedly toward a goal and thinks of how to make progress to be superior to the present all the time.
In the final analysis, cooperation and competition walk hand-in-hand to the well-preparation of a good leadership. As long as the competition happens in a justice way, we can expect as much benefit from it as from cooperation.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 573, Rule ID: ALL_OF_THE[1]
Message: Simply use 'all the'.
Suggestion: all the
...st of the companies. Boss often expects all of the employees to work for a same goal. Admi...
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Line 3, column 796, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... leader to be able to listen to others. Yet, we can barely improve without compe...
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Line 5, column 257, Rule ID: MIGHT_PERHAPS[1]
Message: Use simply 'may', 'possibly'.
Suggestion: may; possibly
... Some detractors state that competition may possibly result in argument. Or, some people may...
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Line 5, column 257, Rule ID: MAY_COULD_POSSIBLY[1]
Message: Use simply 'may'.
Suggestion: may
... Some detractors state that competition may possibly result in argument. Or, some people may...
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Line 5, column 375, Rule ID: IN_A_X_MANNER[1]
Message: Consider replacing "in a proper way" with adverb for "proper"; eg, "in a hasty manner" with "hastily".
...y all means. However, if people compete in a proper way, competition has extreme power to bring...
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Line 7, column 228, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ch benefit from it as from cooperation.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
however, if, may, so, well, no doubt
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 19.5258426966 41% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 12.4196629213 56% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 14.8657303371 54% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 2.0 11.3162921348 18% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 16.0 33.0505617978 48% => OK
Preposition: 56.0 58.6224719101 96% => OK
Nominalization: 17.0 12.9106741573 132% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1575.0 2235.4752809 70% => OK
No of words: 314.0 442.535393258 71% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.01592356688 5.05705443957 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.20951839842 4.55969084622 92% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.94251833205 2.79657885939 105% => OK
Unique words: 195.0 215.323595506 91% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.62101910828 0.4932671777 126% => OK
syllable_count: 493.2 704.065955056 70% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 6.24550561798 48% => OK
Article: 2.0 4.99550561798 40% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.10617977528 129% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.77640449438 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.38483146067 91% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.2370786517 94% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 23.0359550562 69% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 40.3980883232 60.3974514979 67% => OK
Chars per sentence: 82.8947368421 118.986275619 70% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.5263157895 23.4991977007 70% => OK
Discourse Markers: 1.89473684211 5.21951772744 36% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 7.80617977528 77% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 10.2758426966 127% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 5.13820224719 39% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.83258426966 83% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.187814067466 0.243740707755 77% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0508748883373 0.0831039109588 61% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0495380934109 0.0758088955206 65% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.113637977084 0.150359130593 76% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0222146762652 0.0667264976115 33% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.5 14.1392134831 74% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 55.24 48.8420337079 113% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 12.1743820225 78% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.54 12.1639044944 95% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.3 8.38706741573 99% => OK
difficult_words: 77.0 100.480337079 77% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 11.8971910112 76% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 11.2143820225 75% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.7820224719 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.