After completing high school, students should take at least a year off to work or travel before they begin studying at a university.
Our modern life is much more complicated than three decades ago, and all students prepare themselves to get ready and find a better university. While some people believe that students should work or travel before starting study in the university, others agree with the obverse idea. Nevertheless, from my point of view, I think it is better for student to work or travel before studying at the university. I feel this way for two reasons, which I will explore in the following essay.
To begin with, working after graduation from high school can provide valuable experience for students, which is a critical factor for being successful in the future. Although by spending time in work setting after completing high school students can forget some theoretical knowledge, the practical knowledge will help them a lot when they enter to the university. For example, when I was studying at high school I wanted to become a teacher, but after graduation from high school I decided to work in a small company as a research assistant in envirnomental sciense lab. I got lots of experience and realized that I want to be a researcher. Consequensly, all students should work before going to the university to know what they want from life and choose a approprate career for themselves.
Furthermore, nowadays plenty of students want to start study in the university just after finishing haigh school because they think they don't need to refresh their mind and they have to find job soon after graduation from university. Thus, a lot of students become tired and exhusted after two or three semesters, and they cannot focus on studying. On the other hand, students who work or travel after high school, have plenty of motivation and interest. To cast light on this, in my country, a lot of talented students start their university after completing haigh school, but research shows that they fail exams because they feel tired. Moreover, they don't have plan for their future. The more students spend their time for working or travel, the more they bacame interested in life.
In conclusion, I strongly believe that students should work or travel before starting university life. This is because students can get a lot of experience, and also this will help them to focus on studying very well.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, furthermore, if, moreover, nevertheless, so, thus, well, while, for example, i feel, i think, in conclusion, to begin with, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 15.1003584229 46% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 9.8082437276 112% => OK
Conjunction : 17.0 13.8261648746 123% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.0286738351 82% => OK
Pronoun: 39.0 43.0788530466 91% => OK
Preposition: 57.0 52.1666666667 109% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1902.0 1977.66487455 96% => OK
No of words: 384.0 407.700716846 94% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.953125 4.8611393121 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.4267276788 4.48103885553 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.65778142129 2.67179642975 99% => OK
Unique words: 182.0 212.727598566 86% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.473958333333 0.524837075471 90% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 576.9 618.680645161 93% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.59856630824 73% => OK
Article: 5.0 3.08781362007 162% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 5.0 1.86738351254 268% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.6003584229 83% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 22.0 20.1344086022 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 49.6579302287 48.9658058833 101% => OK
Chars per sentence: 111.882352941 100.406767564 111% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.5882352941 20.6045352989 110% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.94117647059 5.45110844103 164% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.5376344086 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.406718318555 0.236089414692 172% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.139102989728 0.076458572812 182% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0849364829237 0.0737576698707 115% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.24887646725 0.150856017488 165% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0520947727162 0.0645574589148 81% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.2 11.7677419355 112% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 57.61 58.1214874552 99% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 10.1575268817 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.73 10.9000537634 108% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.61 8.01818996416 95% => OK
difficult_words: 70.0 86.8835125448 81% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.0537634409 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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