Task 1 Line graph The line graph shows the percentage of New Zealand population from 1950 to 2050

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Task 1: Line graph The line graph shows the percentage of New Zealand population from 1950 to 2050.

The line graph gives information about the proportion of new Zealand population between 1950 and 2050.

It is clear that the proportion of people aged over 65 is anticipated to experience the most noticeable change.Additionally, predictions reveals that the percentages of people in the both age groups of 0-14 and 38-45 will rise slightly whereas those of people aged 25-37 and over 65 will decline gradually.

In 1950,the proportion of over 65-year-old people in new zealand was ranked as the first place at 60%,while that of people aged 0-14 was significantly lower,at approximately 9%.At the same time,the percentages of people in the 25-37 and 38-45 age group occupied 20% and 22% of the total new zealand population respectively.in 2000,the proportion of people aged 25-37 exceeded that of 0-14-year-old-people with 10%.Simultaneously,the proportion growth of people aged over 65 and 38-45 slightly went down in this year.

In 2050,it is anticipated that the proportion of over 65-year-old people will fall steadily to approximately 51% and still stay the highest figure in the line graph,whereas that of 25-37 year olds will experience a shaft fall of 20% to 0%.In the same year,expectations indicate the proportions of people who were 0-14 and 38-45 will grow gradually by roughly 19% and 31% respectively.

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, if, still, whereas, while

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 6.0 7.0 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 1.00243902439 499% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 9.0 6.8 132% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 3.15609756098 222% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 10.0 5.60731707317 178% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 41.0 33.7804878049 121% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 3.97073170732 277% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1124.0 965.302439024 116% => OK
No of words: 208.0 196.424390244 106% => OK
Chars per words: 5.40384615385 4.92477711251 110% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.79765784423 3.73543355544 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.54795966035 2.65546596893 134% => OK
Unique words: 103.0 106.607317073 97% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.495192307692 0.547539520022 90% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 308.7 283.868780488 109% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.45097560976 103% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 1.53170731707 131% => OK
Article: 5.0 4.33902439024 115% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.07073170732 93% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.482926829268 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 3.36585365854 178% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 4.0 8.94146341463 45% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 52.0 22.4926829268 231% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 150.277035837 43.030603864 349% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 281.0 112.824112599 249% => Less chars_per_sentence wanted.
Words per sentence: 52.0 22.9334400587 227% => Less words per sentence wanted.
Discourse Markers: 8.0 5.23603664747 153% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 14.0 1.69756097561 825% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 3.70975609756 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.13902439024 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.09268292683 24% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.147491705426 0.215688989381 68% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.164424001737 0.103423049105 159% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.18363661444 0.0843802449381 218% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.164424001737 0.15604864568 105% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.18363661444 0.0819641961636 224% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 30.0 13.2329268293 227% => Automated_readability_index is high.
flesch_reading_ease: 27.16 61.2550243902 44% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 14.6 6.51609756098 224% => Smog_index is high.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 22.4 10.3012195122 217% => Flesch kincaid grade is high.
coleman_liau_index: 14.93 11.4140731707 131% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.18 8.06136585366 114% => OK
difficult_words: 39.0 40.7170731707 96% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 20.0 11.4329268293 175% => OK
gunning_fog: 22.8 10.9970731707 207% => Gunning_fog is high.
text_standard: 15.0 11.0658536585 136% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 67.4157303371 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.0 Out of 9
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