In the Bayhead Public Library, books that are rarely borrowed continue to take up shelf space year after year, while people who want to read a recent novel frequently find that the library’s only copy is checked out. Clearly, the library’s plan to replace books that are borrowed no more than once a year with sufficient copies of more recent books will solve this problem. The protest we have heard since this plan was made public has come from a small, and thus unrepresentative, group of some thirty people and so should therefore be ignored.
The argument presented by the author in the snippet mentions that the books which are rarely borrowed are consuming more of the library's shelves than the recently more bought novels. So to solve this problem the author suggested removing the old books and introduce frequently bought novels. But, due to this, there were a small group of protesters still demanding the old ones, however, the author tries to ignore this as the group was too small in number. But, while the conclusion drawn by the author might hold water, it rests on several unfounded assumptions that, if not substantiated, dramatically weaken the persuasiveness of the argument. Thus, the following points must be addressed.
Firstly, the author has completely disregarded the group members who were protesting for the demands to retrieve the old books. To satisfy the needs of customers, one should keep in mind to fulfill their needs, irrespective of difficulties one is facing. Perhaps, the author could have made a separate shelf for the old books that were consuming a lot of space. This would have helped the author to get his customers engaged and not to lose them.
Secondly, the author has completely forgotten the possibility of rearranging the shelf. It might be fruitful for the customers if the shelves could be rearranged year-wise in descending order. This will not only help the customers who buy recent novels but also for the customers who buy the old books. This might help them to ease their search for a specific book.
Furthermore, maybe the author might think about the possibility to introduce the concept of e-books. It could be possible that the library at present is low on funds and so could not afford the involvement of new shelves. However, the idea of replacing the less-issued books with frequently bought books could be canceled by introducing e-books. The author could include the e-books for those books that are issued in less amount.
To summarise, the author has provided pieces of evidence to bolster his argument, however, if he might have taken the above-mentioned points into account, the protest by the people might be stopped.
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Comments
e-rater score report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 2 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 5 2
No. of Sentences: 18 15
No. of Words: 355 350
No. of Characters: 1745 1500
No. of Different Words: 179 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.341 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.915 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.642 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 120 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 87 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 60 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 44 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 19.722 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 6.764 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.667 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.343 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.563 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.119 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 442, Rule ID: ADJECTIVE_IN_ATTRIBUTE[1]
Message: A more concise phrase may lose no meaning and sound more powerful.
Suggestion: small
...ies to ignore this as the group was too small in number. But, while the conclusion drawn by the...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, furthermore, however, if, may, second, secondly, so, still, thus, while, as to
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 19.6327345309 76% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 16.0 12.9520958084 124% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 11.1786427146 36% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 9.0 13.6137724551 66% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 22.0 28.8173652695 76% => OK
Preposition: 39.0 55.5748502994 70% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 16.3942115768 30% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1798.0 2260.96107784 80% => OK
No of words: 355.0 441.139720559 80% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.06478873239 5.12650576532 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.34067318298 4.56307096286 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.71192565638 2.78398813304 97% => OK
Unique words: 185.0 204.123752495 91% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.521126760563 0.468620217663 111% => OK
syllable_count: 533.7 705.55239521 76% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 4.96107784431 121% => OK
Article: 10.0 8.76447105788 114% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.70958083832 111% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.22255489022 47% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 19.7664670659 91% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 22.8473053892 83% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 41.1647173028 57.8364921388 71% => OK
Chars per sentence: 99.8888888889 119.503703932 84% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.7222222222 23.324526521 85% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.83333333333 5.70786347227 102% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.25449101796 19% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 8.20758483034 37% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 9.0 6.88822355289 131% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.67664670659 128% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.121382794981 0.218282227539 56% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0393749243939 0.0743258471296 53% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0387140558576 0.0701772020484 55% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0640089866664 0.128457276422 50% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0305759191223 0.0628817314937 49% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.3 14.3799401198 86% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 60.65 48.3550499002 125% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 12.197005988 78% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.07 12.5979740519 96% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.32 8.32208582834 100% => OK
difficult_words: 84.0 98.500998004 85% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.0 12.3882235529 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 11.1389221557 86% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 11.9071856287 109% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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