The responsibility of bringing up children should be shared equally between mother and father
To what extend do you agree or disagree?
The upbringing of the children is the prime goal for the parents as we all agree upon and to understand we must know how and why this responsibility should be balanced equally between both mother and father.
To commence with, we must understand that life is full of tension and problems if one can divide their responsibility equally as parents it would be better for overall growth and happiness of a family. For instance, mother can teach a kid about importance of house hold items and cleanliness in a much better way than father. Better food habits and cooking lessons can be taught by mother in a much better way . Moreover, father can teach and be a good sporting partner in sports activity and he can easily provide knowledge about the positive and negative habits of society. For example, my father once told me to say away from one of my class mate as he was involved in some illegal activities.
However, it’s a worldwide fact that boys are closer to their mother and girls are closer to their father. In that way both the kids can share their problems with whomsoever they are close with. Both parents together can teach about the importance of education and financial responsibility in their own way as both them are involve in those common family problems.
To conclude, I must say that involvement of parents together can not only make children’s life happier but also their own, which brings happiness and stability in the family and children can focus on his future in a much better way and be successful.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 119, Rule ID: EQUALLY_AS[1]
Message: Don't say 'equally as'. You can use either 'equally' or 'as' on its own. When comparing two nouns, use 'just as'.
Suggestion: equally; as; just as
... if one can divide their responsibility equally as parents it would be better for overall ...
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Line 3, column 313, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ems and cleanliness in a much better way than father. Better food habits and cook...
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Line 3, column 411, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Don't put a space before the full stop
Suggestion: .
...be taught by mother in a much better way . Moreover, father can teach and be a goo...
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Line 3, column 625, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...mple, my father once told me to say away from one of my class mate as he was invo...
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Line 5, column 325, Rule ID: BEEN_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'involved'.
Suggestion: involved
...ility in their own way as both them are involve in those common family problems. To ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, however, if, moreover, so, for example, for instance
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 13.1623246493 91% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 7.85571142285 178% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 10.4138276553 154% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 7.30460921844 68% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 26.0 24.0651302605 108% => OK
Preposition: 36.0 41.998997996 86% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.3376753507 72% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1270.0 1615.20841683 79% => OK
No of words: 267.0 315.596192385 85% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.75655430712 5.12529762239 93% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.04229324003 4.20363070211 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.60429584962 2.80592935109 93% => OK
Unique words: 144.0 176.041082164 82% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.539325842697 0.561755894193 96% => OK
syllable_count: 396.0 506.74238477 78% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 5.43587174349 74% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.10420841683 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 10.0 16.0721442886 62% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 26.0 20.2975951904 128% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 53.2150354693 49.4020404114 108% => OK
Chars per sentence: 127.0 106.682146367 119% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.7 20.7667163134 129% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.3 7.06120827912 89% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.01903807615 100% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.67935871743 69% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.186545555248 0.244688304435 76% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.077978816862 0.084324248473 92% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0658434431306 0.0667982634062 99% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.132255549916 0.151304729494 87% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0782174897678 0.056905535591 137% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.3 13.0946893788 109% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 53.55 50.2224549098 107% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 11.3001002004 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.62 12.4159519038 86% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.76 8.58950901804 90% => OK
difficult_words: 48.0 78.4519038076 61% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 13.0 9.78957915832 133% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 10.1190380762 123% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.7795591182 121% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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