The tables below give the information a the temperatures and hours of daylight in two cities during the same weekend in May 2007

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The tables below give the information a the temperatures and hours of daylight in two cities during the same weekend in May 2007.

Overall, the information about temperatures and daylight hours in two cities are given in the tables, the two cities had significant differences about the temperatures and hours of daylight,
In Mumbai, India on Friday the maximum temperature is 33 Celsius degree, and the minimum temperature is 29 Celsius degree, the sun rises at 6 AM and goes down at 19:11 PM that means the hours of daylight is approximately 13 hours and 11 minutes. On Saturday and Sunday the temperatures and daylight hours in Mumbai, India doesn’t didn’t change much a lot. While , in Moscow, Russia the temperatures on Friday were extremely cold only 8 Celsius degree, that was the maximum most ,and the minimum degree is was even colder about lower approximately 5 Celsius, but the temperatures eventually subsenquently rise up, on Saturday the temperature was at 13 Celsius degree and 2 Celsius degree minimally, on Sunday the maximum and minimum temperature are were 17 and 8 Celsius degree respectively , the daylight hours in Moscow, Russia are extraordinarily long, the sun rise rose at 4:52 AM, and the Sunset’s was at 22:04 PM,that give us about was 18 hours of daylight in Moscow , Russia.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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... the temperatures and hours of daylight, In Mumbai, India on Friday the maximum t...
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...elsius degree, that was the maximum most ,and the minimum degree is was even colde...
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...he maximum most ,and the minimum degree is was even colder about lower approximate...
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...maximum most ,and the minimum degree is was even colder about lower approximately 5...
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...y subsenquently rise up, on Saturday the temperature was at 13 Celsius degree and...
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...the maximum and minimum temperature are were 17 and 8 Celsius degree respectively , ...
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...about was 18 hours of daylight in Moscow , Russia.
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Line 2, column 984, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
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...8 hours of daylight in Moscow , Russia.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, if, while

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 7.0 200% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 0.0 1.00243902439 0% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 6.8 191% => OK
Relative clauses : 3.0 3.15609756098 95% => OK
Pronoun: 4.0 5.60731707317 71% => OK
Preposition: 26.0 33.7804878049 77% => OK
Nominalization: 1.0 3.97073170732 25% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 985.0 965.302439024 102% => OK
No of words: 195.0 196.424390244 99% => OK
Chars per words: 5.05128205128 4.92477711251 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.73687570622 3.73543355544 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.0239706564 2.65546596893 114% => OK
Unique words: 94.0 106.607317073 88% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.482051282051 0.547539520022 88% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 300.6 283.868780488 106% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.45097560976 103% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 1.53170731707 131% => OK
Article: 5.0 4.33902439024 115% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.07073170732 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 4.0 0.482926829268 828% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 5.0 3.36585365854 149% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 3.0 8.94146341463 34% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 65.0 22.4926829268 289% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 212.642109345 43.030603864 494% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 328.333333333 112.824112599 291% => Less chars_per_sentence wanted.
Words per sentence: 65.0 22.9334400587 283% => Less words per sentence wanted.
Discourse Markers: 4.66666666667 5.23603664747 89% => OK
Paragraphs: 2.0 3.83414634146 52% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 12.0 1.69756097561 707% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 2.0 3.70975609756 54% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.13902439024 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.09268292683 24% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.228463028096 0.215688989381 106% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.176393175398 0.103423049105 171% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.083155295196 0.0843802449381 99% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.255675283954 0.15604864568 164% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.113350289615 0.0819641961636 138% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 34.9 13.2329268293 264% => Automated_readability_index is high.
flesch_reading_ease: 13.96 61.2550243902 23% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 17.1 6.51609756098 262% => Smog_index is high.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 27.5 10.3012195122 267% => Flesch kincaid grade is high.
coleman_liau_index: 12.9 11.4140731707 113% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.53 8.06136585366 118% => OK
difficult_words: 33.0 40.7170731707 81% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 20.0 11.4329268293 175% => OK
gunning_fog: 28.0 10.9970731707 255% => Gunning_fog is high.
text_standard: 28.0 11.0658536585 253% => The average readability is very high. Good job!
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 67.4157303371 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.0 Out of 9
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