In achieving personal happiness, our relationships with other people (family, friends, colleagues) are more important than anything else. Issues such as work and wealth take second place.
Argue in support of this claim.
As usual, people believe that the success of a person is estimated and measured through their present occupation and accumulated property. However, my opinion is the opposite, I suppose that our happiness depends on our surrounding relationships, which is the spiritual support for high-pressured, hard-working existence.
Many support the view that wealth can not substitute the relationship with family, friends, colleagues. In reality, there is a minority of millionaires completely blissful, it can not be denied that their material life is sufficient to maintain for the long run. They do not lack anything; because of that, sustainable health or property is seldom a massive obstacle they have to face. Despite they can gain a healthy physical body, it does not mean that money can heal or be a reliance for spiritual well-being. For example, in recent years, a wide range of celebrities meet myriad symptoms of depression. Due to rare friendships in that stringent industry, they have no one to confide their stress or share secrets with as normal people.
The relationship is not only spiritual assistance but also a factor supporting other issues such as career or wealth. It is usually said that a successful person is who can balance work and relationships, especially in economic and political sectors. They comprehend how vital the nexus is and utilize them to advance their occupation's accomplishment. Without social connections, they will stray, deal with loneliness, manage every obstacle by themselves.
To conclude, only wealth or flashy careers can not bring peace, harmony, and happiness to this complicated life. It is obvious to state that the most crucial supplement for a beatific being is still surrounding relationships. When people get old, they will realize that money is not the final destination which is gathering with family and friends.
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| 2020-01-03 | philony | 92 | view |
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, however, if, so, still, well, for example, i suppose, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 13.1623246493 137% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 7.85571142285 102% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 10.4138276553 125% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 7.30460921844 192% => OK
Pronoun: 32.0 24.0651302605 133% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 27.0 41.998997996 64% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.3376753507 108% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1585.0 1615.20841683 98% => OK
No of words: 296.0 315.596192385 94% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.35472972973 5.12529762239 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.14784890444 4.20363070211 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.08276795631 2.80592935109 110% => OK
Unique words: 184.0 176.041082164 105% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.621621621622 0.561755894193 111% => OK
syllable_count: 480.6 506.74238477 95% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 5.43587174349 202% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.76152304609 126% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 16.0721442886 93% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.2975951904 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 22.5207065214 49.4020404114 46% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 105.666666667 106.682146367 99% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.7333333333 20.7667163134 95% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.8 7.06120827912 68% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.01903807615 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 8.67935871743 138% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.160313937753 0.244688304435 66% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0530161727396 0.084324248473 63% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0604017663363 0.0667982634062 90% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.105066533194 0.151304729494 69% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0369098556042 0.056905535591 65% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.6 13.0946893788 104% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 52.19 50.2224549098 104% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 11.3001002004 95% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.75 12.4159519038 111% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.65 8.58950901804 112% => OK
difficult_words: 95.0 78.4519038076 121% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 9.78957915832 123% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.1190380762 95% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.7795591182 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.